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Happy Hour

I received a vintage bottle
of wine, from a time gone past;
each time it tastes much sweeter
erasing "quick"! The drop 'twas last.

~

At the present, I'm indulging
my parched throat to a stout, ale "gift";
'twas from my hairdresser/mechanic,
guess she thought I needed a lift.

~

As I "age" my own proclivity
has me leaning away from beer,
and wine's too tempermental
causing a melancholy tear.

~

So, in my up & coming future
sour mash whiskey will do, "fine";
it's strength will erase that taste of ale,
not to mention, that sugary wine!

~

For in life's grandest scheme of things
I am no "quitter", won't even try;
hence, I'm forever cursed
to take libations "til I die !

About This Poem

Last Few Words: Oh ! PLluuuusssssssssssss.....there is no "denile" prevailent, in my family tree !

Style/Type: Structured: Western

Review Request Direction: How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: The High Desert, in the wild west, southern California, U.S. of A.., USA

Favorite Poets: Keates, Poe, Dickinson, and Dr. Seuss. There are a smattering of others, but why bother listing 'em all, ya know?, I also rely on a few of our poets, here....for advice, and what not. I couldn't possibly explain what a fountain of live, effective knowledge we have...right here in our midst ! To catch a glimmer of brilliance, merely visit: the Stream.

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Comments

judyanne

judyanne

13 years 11 months ago

lol doc

i 'take libations' every now and then, then i have 'the day after' to remind myself why i don't 'take libations'

this is fun
but i found it a bit offputting having it spread down the page as it is
i think it would have better timing if made into simple quatrains

nice rhythm and rhyme
love judy
xxx

docmaverick

docmaverick

13 years 11 months ago

Well, dearest Judy....

...I've made said adjustment, and I both concur, and I've corrected. Thanx for your kind words, and feedback.
Greatly appreciated;
sincerely,
doc.