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Clentin
Clentin
Apr 03, 2023 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

Happiness

Happiness we seek
Making life’s trials recede
In our thoughts each day

— Clentin, Apr 03, 2023

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Geezer

Geezer

3 years 2 months ago

If you are...

going for a Haiku, you need, [well, should have], another syllable in that second line. I would suggest:

Making [our] life trials recede.
Just saying. Happy thought for the day! ~ Geezer.
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Geezer

Geezer

3 years 2 months ago

Sorry...

My American accent is showing! LoL
I counted [trials] as one. Ooops! ~ Geezer.
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Mr joghe

Mr joghe

3 years 2 months ago

Kudos

Good write!
Happiness is the priority of every necessity