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Apr 22, 2011
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haiku II
" The universe can,
influence impact on life.
Stand there and watch it"
About This Poem
Style/Type: Structured: Eastern
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Not actively editing
Comments
Eduardo Cruz
15 years ago
Rosi
That's the idea, people forget to look. My lady (Jonette) and l always go for walks and gaze at the marvel of the universe. it's a beautiful thing for me that she enjoys it as much as I.
so go enjoy and make it a habit so as to not forget, we are but specks
Thank you sweetie
mand
15 years ago
Hi Eddie
Alot said in a few words! We just need to stand and watch sometimes.
Thanks for sharing.
Love Mand xxxxxx
Eduardo Cruz
15 years ago
mand
thanks for stopping by and your comment
scribbler
15 years ago
hello Eddie
You know old tinker just can't help but give folks alternatives lol.L-2 try: influence and impact life, to see if it fits your intent. Damn, can't even do a Haiku without scribbler sticking his nose in...............stan
Eduardo Cruz
15 years ago
Stan
NOOO!
hahaha!
I like your idea alot, but i won't do it. hard headed sometimes.
thank you stan i always appreciate your help.
CCfire
15 years ago
universal stars
universal stars
bide time on earth until we
enter the darkness
Your haiku more than contemplates our place in it all. Nice job.
Eduardo Cruz
15 years ago
Chez
I bow in thank you!
magics02
15 years ago
Brilliant Ed
I think you excel in this style. I really like this, such short words..powerful message
Bravo Maestro Ed
Mona
xox
Eduardo Cruz
15 years ago
Mona
thank you for the brilliant,
I am humbled by your comment, but I am far from a "Maestro"
Again thank you very much!
raj
15 years ago
If i may add
listen to the birds
whisper of a gentle breeze
sweet music to ears
Eduardo Cruz
15 years ago
Hey you!
Don't post beautiful things like that on my page, your making me look bad. Hahaha!
Thanks for stopping by Raj, nice of you to visit!
raj
15 years ago
Hi Eddie
lol..i attempted to add frills to the lovely message in your beautiful haiku..
Eduardo Cruz
15 years ago
Raj
And a fine addition that it is.
Thanks again,