Galactic Stew

Her violet pupils are set in yellow bloodshot eyes
this witch with dragon of pink and soft little scales
that looks at backwards feet.
It smiles as pencil curved eye brows do stretch.
Her soupy brew is steamy and ghostly.

Antenna fish with red lips and body gaps are hungry
swimming through seas of citric acid storms.
They fall into swirls of mixed kumquats,
acorns and jelly beans— moving slowly round and round
with yellow and red pan cakes, that spiral stacked on top of
red, blue, orange, and green alien predators.

— mark, May 15, 2017

About This Poem

Style/Type: Free verse

Review Request Direction: What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: USA the bay state, United Kingdom, Australia, South Africa, Nigeria, Canada, Europe, USA

Favorite Poets: Mary Oliver: Known for her accessible and spiritual poetry that draws heavily on observations of the natural world. She often finds profound lessons and connections in the mundane, from a walk in the woods to the flight of a bird. , Robert Frost: While sometimes seen as a poet of rural life, his work is rich with observations of nature, which he often uses to explore themes of human isolation, choices, and the relationship between humanity and the natural world. , Walt Whitman: A central figure in American poetry, he celebrated nature as a force of unity and a reflection of the human spirit. His work often connects the individual to the vastness of the cosmos and the natural world. , William Wordsworth: A key figure in the Romantic movement, he emphasized the spiritual and emotional connections., Jess Taper: his profess of concentrated awareness of experience in poetry in true freestyle was profound.

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Critiques

Geezer

9 years ago

Very vivid...

and visually stunning! I have no precedent by which to judge this. My take on this poem, is that it sounds like a trip through the "Looking Glass"! My guess, is that you have eaten the wrong kind of mushrooms. Verrrrry interesting! ~ Gee.
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Esker

9 years ago

mortar strike hit the kp and chaplan charlies

the heads watching dusk burn
the nineties skewing crack
like rhetoric swinging
the winded soundtrack
lack the universal key
hatch the plot of eternity
visage door of portent
lend
crude homemade
patch
return to sender

i think its awesome
abstract is out of my
reach
homemade walkman
tatoos and bic ink

thank U Mark!

WhiskeyOscarLimaFoxtrot

Obadiah Grey

2 years 12 months ago

Must have missed this the

Must have missed this the first time around,
You could read this a hundred times and still
draw a different conclusion on every one.

You managed to pique the interest of big Gee and
lubricated Esker's cogs so, it must be good.

Cheers, Obi.