01/26 While the World Freezes Image Contest

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Fam

While the world freezes all around us
We will keep our home cozy and warm
Because no matter what happens out there
Love can stand against any bitter storm

While the world freezes all around us
Faith and trust will keep closer together
Ensuring our family ties grow stronger
No matter how destructive the weather

While the world freezes all around us
Remember the kindliness in your heart
When everything near seems grim or hopeless
Hope will always be there, right from the start

While the world freezes all around us
Or uncertainty tries to skew your view
Remember the sincere kindheartedness
And the love that family shares with you

About This Poem

Review Request Direction: What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
Is the internal logic consistent?

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - polished draft

About the Author

Region, Country: California, US, USA

Favorite Poets: Maya Angelou, William Carlos Williams, Pablo Neruda, Robert Frost, Edgar Allan Poe, Walt Whitman, Charles Bukowski, Alfredo Espino, Roque Dalton and several more.

Comments

Candlewitch

3 months ago

hello again Wallyroo92,

Beautifully written with heart, my favorite lines are:

While the world freezes all around us
Faith and trust will keep closer together
Ensuring our family ties grow stronger
No matter how destructive the weather

always, Cat

Wallyroo92

2 months 2 weeks ago

Fam

Greetings Cat.

Thank you so much for your comment. I've always enjoyed pieces that have a repeating line but given the contest and them, I felt that this is what family meant most to me.

Wallyroo92

2 months 2 weeks ago

Fam

Greetings Cat.

Thank you so much for your comment. I've always enjoyed pieces that have a repeating line but given the contest and them, I felt that this is what family meant most to me.

John Leslie O'Kelley

2 months 2 weeks ago

Fam!

Family is strength if you choose for it to be. We all make a choice every time we collide. Just think of warm fuzzy things, they will keep you alive. That is the way this affected me and I loved what I read!

Wallyroo92

2 months 2 weeks ago

Fam

Thank you so much Leslie.

Yes, family is that solid foundation that gives us the fundementals to be loving and productive members of society. I'm lucky enough to have had great parents, even with faults and mishaps, we learn that we're not perfect, but we strive to have that strong family bond.

Hope you're doing well.