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Apr 26, 2013
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Ennui
protracted stitches
circumference of each orbit
abrade motives
time chewed
and spat impiously
Descartes cursed
banality of insights
this abscessed “being”
Abdicates
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Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
Ross Hamilton Hill
12 years 12 months ago
Hi
are you a nurse? like the 'ab' alliteration, although abcessed seems too graphic, surely your not that bad?
'the greatest disease is unhappiness'
regards
ross
Ian.T
12 years 12 months ago
Ida
Idle hands find light work.
Yet an Idle mind sometimes races too fast for logic to take place.
Hope you didn't drop a stitch there.
Then I noticed that you retreated and gave up.
Such is a mind that cannot think of something to do, when all is going on.. lol.
Take care, an interesting write, Yours Ian.T