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Apr 26, 2013
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Ennui
protracted stitches
circumference of each orbit
abrade motives
time chewed
and spat impiously
Descartes cursed
banality of insights
this abscessed “being”
Abdicates
— ida, Apr 26, 2013
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Ross Hamilton Hill
13 years 1 month ago
Hi
are you a nurse? like the 'ab' alliteration, although abcessed seems too graphic, surely your not that bad?
'the greatest disease is unhappiness'
regards
ross
Ian.T
13 years 1 month ago
Ida
Idle hands find light work.
Yet an Idle mind sometimes races too fast for logic to take place.
Hope you didn't drop a stitch there.
Then I noticed that you retreated and gave up.
Such is a mind that cannot think of something to do, when all is going on.. lol.
Take care, an interesting write, Yours Ian.T