End Of Day

summer night relief
curtains exhale silently
cool air tiptoes in

— Lavender, Jul 18, 2023

About This Poem

Style/Type: Structured: Eastern

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Country/Region: United States

Favorite Poets: I tend to read Ted Kooser, Jim Harrison, Billy Collins, Paul Simon, Robert Frost. I like minimalist poetry, and poems reflecting on nature and Mother Earth.

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Critiques

Geezer

2 years 10 months ago

I have a memory...

that comes back to me from my youth; a scene of watching a woman asleep on my bed, the curtains doing that very thing,
exhaling a cooling breeze, like blowing on a hot spoonful of soup. Getting ready for the next sip. Very nice! ~ Geez.
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Lavender

2 years 10 months ago

Hello, Geezer!

Wow..."a cooling breeze, like blowing on a hot spoonful of soup." What an absolutely great visual! Maybe the foundation for a Geezer haiku / poem?
Thank you for reading and sharing your wonderful memory!
L