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May 22, 2013
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A Discourse by Two Mortal Enemies Whose Wish Is Peace
I surrender my Faith to your protection...
Your Faith is as an honored guest in my home...
About This Poem
Review Request Direction:
What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
How does this theme appeal to you?
Is the internal logic consistent?
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Not actively editing
Comments
Dalton
12 years 11 months ago
Hi Josephus
An interesting start to a poem but I was expecting more of it.
John
Ian.T
12 years 11 months ago
Josephus
As Dalton has said, the talk between the two should be more binding if both wanted peace, there is a quandary here.
They should both have talked about the person and not the beliefs ether of them had, it would have made more of an acceptance..
Yours Ian.T
Dalton
12 years 11 months ago
I liked what you wrote...
I liked what you wrote. Maybe Ian T. gave it more thought than I did. I just thought the "poem" was too short I wanted more. Just my opinion
John
Ian.T
12 years 11 months ago
John
It is a Zulu greeting to another, They just say "I see you"
This greeting in its simplicity means a lot to the two that are meeting.
In those three words they totally accept the other person.
I might be corrected here but I have always accepted it so,
It was really good to be greeted in such a way,
Yours Ian.T
Dalton
12 years 9 months ago
Hi Josephus
I still think this is a strong piece handled well. It has the feel of ancient wisdom. That sounds bad but you know what I mean. Still leaves me with a thirst for more.
John
scribbler
12 years 9 months ago
Hmmm....
I might be reading more into this than is here but it sounds like a Muslim who has immagrated to America where he knows he is safe practicing his religion.................stan