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Jun 28, 2022
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Disappearing Castles
I have seen it.
There is a castle on a hill
Shrouded in gold
And rubies and silken sheets
And I think
I
Can
See
It
In
Front
Of
Me
For a
M
o
m
e
n
t
But then I can’t quite picture it
And I wonder
Just where my castle
Has gone.
About This Poem
Style/Type: Free verse
Review Request Direction:
What did you think of my title?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
Review Request Intensity: I appreciate moderate constructive criticism
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
Jackweb
3 years 4 months ago
Welcome aboard!
Hallucinations are sensory experiences that appear real but are created by your mind.
Causes of hallucination:
*Alcohol and drugs.
I can say this is figment of the imagination!
Candlewitch
3 years 4 months ago
dear Mia,
this is a very wistful write. yearning for something that once was but is no longer... I remember this feeling from another time and place... excellent.
always, Cat & eddy
p.s
welcome to the Neopoet site. it is very nice to meet you and your poetry! I'll be watching for more from you soon!
*hugs, Cat