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The Dirty, yet Sturdy, Nerdy, Wordy Hurdy-Gurdy Man

I can emulate my own, best amigo
or my fiercest, and worse enemy;

I also could end up easily, beside myself
continually, convicingly arguing things over, and over with, me!

However, whatever I'm feeling down inside
will usually fade, and disappear from my view;

unless, of course I see right through myself
with my hidden agendas all shining through.

Plus, I even seem to be more confused, of late
and so unsure of which facts I should give;

I actually did want to get my whole story, straight
but I've been indicisive, and so, argumentative.

I've also been so, very distant
and long-distance relationships, suck!

I then became wistfull, and serendipitiously
took turns, taking sides, with no luck.

Now, finally convinced I am trustworthy
I've made an example of myself plain to see;

if the most unheard of thing I have heard of
in the long run, will still sound good to me!

I honestly can't say, that I honestly care
to side in with one who can't, or won't say;

exactly what each of his minds, think
and which one will soon get, his own way!

About This Poem

Last Few Words: Too wordy for a nonsense poem? Nonsense!

Style/Type: Structured: Western

Review Request Direction: What did you think of my title?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
[This option has been removed]

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - draft

About the Author

Region, Country: The High Desert, in the wild west, southern California, U.S. of A.., USA

Favorite Poets: Keates, Poe, Dickinson, and Dr. Seuss. There are a smattering of others, but why bother listing 'em all, ya know?, I also rely on a few of our poets, here....for advice, and what not. I couldn't possibly explain what a fountain of live, effective knowledge we have...right here in our midst ! To catch a glimmer of brilliance, merely visit: the Stream.

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pleiades

13 years 10 months ago

me lurve your title!

me lurve your title!
it's what drew me to read this write

i like that this seems to fall somewhere between
humour and pathos (well, it did for me!)

there are a couple of places i think could
benefit from some tightening up...perhaps just
lose the odd word or two...and i definitely
think you have over-used the humble comma...the over-use
here hinders a natural thought patten and causes the reader
to pause where they need not

regardless of that hic-up, i think you have
taken an unoriginal theme, and given it an
original twist

cheers
p

docmaverick

docmaverick

13 years 10 months ago

Well, Pleiades....

...I just "lurve" the curve of your verbs....while commenting, as well! Plus, I've always favored the pathetic side of my humorousity! That's exactly why I limply, and gimply "pimp" out those unsuspectng commas...I guess that's how us old, poetical gangsters "come a-" -round to finishing things.
Your comment was a delight!
Sincerely, thanx;
doc.