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Dec 23, 2022
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Dear Hanh
Your eyes
Rose above the hill
So many had failed to climb
What did you find?
(your answer here, please)
Oh, dragonfly.
Thomas
— Triskelion, Dec 23, 2022
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About This Poem
Last Few Words: Cultural differences need time and patience to harmonize.
Review Request Direction: How does this theme appeal to you?
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Critiques
Candlewitch
3 years 5 months ago
dear Triskelion,
a surprise ending is always an eye-opener! I agree with the sentiment behind the poem, and I'm glad to have read it.
*hugs, Cat
Rula
3 years 5 months ago
Hello Thomas
I'm a fan of bravity, and this is an excellent example of succinctness.. I might not have gotten the full message yet I still appreciate the thought.
I too had to agree with your last words. I'm one of those who come from a very different culture to most of those fellow poets who post here, which makes me consider and reconsider what I post before I do, so that I won't be misunderstood.
Thank you for sharing.
Rosewood Apothecary
3 years 5 months ago
Really interesting
You think it’s not a big commitment because it’s only a few lines until you read it. Then it’s a microcosmic universe
Tim
Geezer
3 years 5 months ago
Amen...
~ Geez.
.
Triskelion
3 years 4 months ago
Ah, well
There was hope. I was really trying. Thanks for all your comments and keep thinking the future will be brighter and friendlier. Cheers all.
Thomas