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scribbler
Feb 12, 2013 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

CLOUD WATCHERS (Haiku)

Blue eyes blink open
across tattering gray sky
to watch storm depart

— scribbler, Feb 12, 2013

About This Poem

Style/Type: Structured: Eastern

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - draft

About the Author

Region, Country: South Carolina, United States, USA

Favorite Poets: Frost, Burns, Longfellow, Poe, and Johnson. I guess you've noticed these are all past masters. Other than folks on site I don't read any contemporary poets .

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Critiques

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scribbler

13 years 3 months ago

Hi Rula

I'm hoping that someone realizes what the "blue eyes" are. Thanks for coming by...........stan

Ian.T

Ian.T

13 years 3 months ago

Stan

The picture was complete, in this grand write, I look forward to the storm departing lol,
Yours Ian

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scribbler

13 years 3 months ago

Hi Ian

A short poem for a short term view lol..........stan

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scribbler

13 years 3 months ago

Hi Frenchi

I struggled between using winked or blinked and decided a wink carried too much of a closing connotation. Now PEEP is a different thing! I might need to "borrow" that for edit with your permission............stan

Seren

Seren

13 years 3 months ago

hi Stan

This ones beautiful touching on the profound

Nothing to add its lovely as is

Love Jc xxx

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scribbler

13 years 3 months ago

Hi Jayne

Imagine that . An old grizzled bald headed guy like me even getting close to the profound lmao. Thanks for such kind comment.............stan