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Oct 12, 2016
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closure for a broken heart
I knew it was over when you spoke about her more passionately than you ever spoke about me. I never experienced heart break, but with every word of adoration your mouth formed about this brown eyed beauty, that didn't come close to my green ones. I could feel it slowly breaking apart.
How could you even talk about her to me, when you knew how much I loved you? Did you want me to resent you? To hate you? To talk about you the way you talked about her when she so selfishly used your love?
I think that you knew I could never hurt you, and that's why you kept coming back. Sometimes I want to thank her.
Does it make me too terrible of a person to say that I'm happy you got your heart broken to.
About This Poem
Last Few Words: Thank you for reading.
Style/Type: Free verse
Review Request Direction:
What did you think of my title?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - draft
Comments
Esker
9 years ago
honest poetry
everyones now broken...nothing like "breaking" the ice
Green eyes...rarest of rare...
mine are grey
good ol Love..fickle at any age
but makes for writing
poems....
still a tough go
when it happens in real
time or makes a fiction
peice real
Great poem!
Thank U!
Candlewitch
9 years ago
hello
although there is "Closure" in the title...I cannot find any in this piece. the feelings in the theme are raw and resentful. it doesn't feel like the emotions being expressed are those of a person who has accepted and moved on.
in this sentence:Does it make me too terrible of a person to say that I'm happy you got your heart broken to. to should be spelled: too.
nice to meet you. keep writing.
always, Cat