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Blue Light Special
Faces gather in the blue glow,
yet somehow drift apart.
A thousand conversations blooming,
few reaching the heart.
We trade handshakes for reactions,
porches for endless feeds.
Collecting fragments of attention,
while starving deeper needs.
Friends become profile pictures,
laughter compressed to lines.
We witness curated moments,
mistaking them for lives.
The coffee cools beside us,
the sunset slips away.
Eyes fixed upon a glowing window,
while life waits just outside the frame.
Seasons turn without asking,
children grow, old friends move on.
We promise we’ll reconnect tomorrow,
then wonder where the years have gone.
The world still sings in birdsong,
in campfires, storms, and trees.
In stories shared face-to-face,
and comfortable silences at ease.
Yet the current pulls us deeper,
scroll by scroll, day by day.
Not with malice or intention,
just a thousand small delays.
Then one day the screen goes dark,
and the room becomes still and clear.
We finally hear the voices
that were waiting all those years.
The question is not what we posted,
or how many hearts approved.
It’s who we held,
who we loved,
and whether we looked up
before they moved
About This Poem
Style/Type: Free verse
Editing Stage: Not actively editing
Critiques
Geezer
3 days 19 hours ago
Not free verse...
this is a lot of near and very close rhyme. I liked it for the most part, it could have been a bit better with the meter, but with a little tune-up, this could be quite easy to read and appreciate. ~ Geezer.
Jamie
3 days 19 hours ago
Wow. I didn’t join to get…
Wow. I didn’t join to get critiqued. I don’t read to correct or give advice unless asked. Is every thing posted to be analyzed? This is very sterile & saccharine. I write & read for expression, the spirit & intention behind the words.. If this is the focus of this site I will read only. By the way, you don’t have prose as a category and I don’t strive to rhyme. With respect, your analysis is condescending. Thank you, anyway.
victorezike123
2 days 17 hours ago
Beautiful Poem. This really…
Beautiful Poem. This really showed the distinction between living life from the blue light and living life outside the blue light. I wrote a poem that is similar to that theme. I will post it later and please don't stop posting on this platform because of critiques. I would like to read more of your poems. God bless.
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