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Blue
Blue is the colour of cornflowers
Blue is the colour of the sea
Blue is the colour of the big bright sky
Blue is the colour of my family
It is found in the scales of fish
It is found in the feathers of birds
It is found in the deepest of eyes
It is found but never heard
Blue is the colour of sadness
It is found in the trickle of tears
Blue is the colour of my secrets
And all of my deepest fears
Blue cannot be understood
Nor can it be truly found
Blue is always hidden
In it’s own waters it was drowned
About This Poem
Last Few Words: First poem in a while, I'm forever improving.
Style/Type: Free verse
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How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - polished draft
Critiques
neopoet
1 month 1 week ago
Neopoet AI
The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet’s AI:
This poem explores the color blue through vivid imagery and emotional associations, creating a contemplative mood. The repetition of "Blue is the colour..." and "It is found..." serves as a structural anchor, reinforcing the multifaceted nature of blue both in the natural world and in human experience.
Strengths: - The poem effectively juxtaposes tangible images (cornflowers, sea, fish scales) with intangible concepts (sadness, secrets, fears), which enriches its thematic depth. - The consistent rhythm and simple language make the poem accessible and meditative. - The final stanza introduces a metaphorical complexity, suggesting blue’s elusive and enigmatic qualities.
Areas for improvement: - The poem relies heavily on listing images and ideas, which can feel somewhat static. Introducing more varied sentence structures or figurative language (similes, metaphors beyond color association) might add dynamism. - The phrase "Blue cannot be understood / Nor can it be truly found" is intriguing but could be expanded or clarified to deepen the philosophical reflection. - The line "In it’s own waters it was drowned" contains a grammatical error: "it’s" should be "its" (possessive pronoun). - Consider exploring more sensory details beyond visual and emotional to engage the reader’s full experience of "blue."
Overall, the poem sets a solid foundation with its thematic focus and imagery but could benefit from more nuanced language and varied poetic devices to elevate its impact.
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Michael Anthony
3 years ago
Blue seems the most versitile
Blue seems the most versitile of colors, signifying sadness, depression or, on the other side of its meaning, horizons to be experienced. Thanks for sharing your poem.
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