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Apr 29, 2019
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BLOSSOMS' BANE
Sunshine through new leaves
Far crow fussing at bored hawk
cut short by my sneeze
— scribbler, Apr 29, 2019
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About This Poem
Last Few Words: It had been too long since I wrote a Haiku
Style/Type: Structured: Eastern
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Critiques
Seren
7 years 1 month ago
Bro
I heard that sneeze and saw fluttering wings.
This one is a little bit of fun on the surface. But its a sneaky bugger. Implants images.
I love it.
Love always Sis.
scribbler
7 years 1 month ago
LOL
"Sneaky" good huh". Well I should sneeze more lol........stan
Seren
7 years 1 month ago
Hahaha Sneeze or not ?
I've never read a poem that you've written ?that doesnt provide imagry. Sneaky *real good* lol
Hugs x
scribbler
7 years 1 month ago
lol
To sneeze or not to sneeze, that is the question
Geezer
7 years 1 month ago
Damn...
that was good! Trouble is, that one just ain't enough, like Lay's potato- chips. ~ Gee.
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scribbler
7 years 1 month ago
Hi Geeze
Seems the less I write in a poem the better people like it.......hmmmm........
Geezer
7 years 1 month ago
It was not...
my implication, that you should write less in your poems, only that you should write more Haiku. Maybe a string of them in one set?
~ Gee.
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scribbler
7 years 1 month ago
I was just
poking fun at myself. Been a Long time since I did a haiku series.....maybe time to think up another one........