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Sep 18, 2013
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I am/ not sure/ of all/ the rules/
I thought/ that they/ were all/ for fools
But now/ I know/ that it/ is good
And I/ o/bey/ like I/ sh/ould
About This Poem
Last Few Words: Is this right?
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
Rula
12 years ago
other than you have written
other than you have written your quatrain in Tetrameter instead of pentrameter I think you are doing fine except for the last line.
I am/ not sure/ of all/ the rules/
I thought/ that they/ were all/ for fools
But now/ I know/ that it/ is good
And I/ o-bey/ like-I/ should-? / (half foot is needed)
can you amend?
Geezer
12 years ago
I've been...
really tired and not making much sense of any written material lately. Sorry I didn't do it in the right meter.
But here is my half foot:
I am/ not sure/ of all/ the rules
I thought/ that they/ were all/ for fools
But now/ I know/ that it/ is good
And I/ o- bey/ them as/ I should
scribbler
12 years ago
Hi Gee
Thank god that I have company in having trouble with pentameter. But the meter looks pretty good except that last line which begins with iambic.......i think....................stan
wesley snow
12 years ago
Just checking.
The revision solves it. But of course Iamb is the easy one... bwa ha ha ha.
wesley snow
12 years ago
Sorry.
It's late. I'm a little punchy.