crypticbard

Apr 28, 2026 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

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bemusedly ruminating

"bemusedly ruminating"

Forget
the balm of barometric exuberance.
This night
no longer young, dissipates.

Recall
the dewy welcome of sun-quaffed green.
Yesterdays
revive severed umbilical dreams.

Peruse
the present with fleeting acumen.
Today
ceases yet emerges again tomorrow.

Ignite
the kindling of autumnal reticence.
Perhaps
genial kindnesses shall spring.

— crypticbard, Apr 28, 2026

About This Poem

Last Few Words: Forget the easy lift of a warm, steady day. This night, older than it feels, thins as it goes. Recall the first‑light green that once felt close at hand. Yesterdays stir what was cut loose before it could grow. Look at the present with whatever clarity you can find. Today flickers, then gathers itself for another turn. Light the quiet tinder of this late‑season calm. Perhaps small kindnesses will rise from here. .

Review Request Direction: What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?

Review Request Intensity: I appreciate moderate constructive criticism

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: West Moreton, AUS

Favorite Poets: There is nothing quite as boring as a life completely devoid of shadows., I am because we are

Critiques

neopoet

1 month ago

Neopoet AI [2025-04]

The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet’s AI:

This poem presents a contemplative meditation on time, memory, and emotional states through a series of imperatives and reflective statements. The structure, with its brief, stanza-like groupings and use of enjambment, creates a rhythmic ebb and flow that mirrors the thematic focus on cycles and transitions.

Strengths: - The vocabulary is rich and evocative, with phrases like "barometric exuberance," "sun-quaffed green," and "autumnal reticence" painting vivid, if somewhat abstract, images. - The poem’s progression from forgetfulness to recall, present awareness, and hopeful ignition of kindness suggests a thoughtful emotional journey. - The use of imperatives ("Forget," "Recall," "Peruse," "Ignite") effectively engages the reader and structures the poem’s movement.

Areas for improvement: - Some phrases, while evocative, may feel opaque or overly dense, potentially distancing readers. For example, "barometric exuberance" and "severed umbilical dreams" are striking but could benefit from clearer contextual grounding or more concrete imagery. - The poem’s abstractness might be balanced with more sensory details or specific images to deepen emotional resonance and accessibility. - The final stanza’s hopeful tone ("genial kindnesses shall spring") contrasts with earlier melancholy but could be expanded or clarified to enhance the poem’s resolution.

Suggestions: - Consider varying line length or stanza breaks to emphasize key moments or shifts in tone. - Experiment with more concrete imagery or metaphor to anchor the abstract concepts. - Reflect on whether the poem’s mood and message are fully conveyed to readers unfamiliar with the vocabulary or themes, and adjust for clarity where needed.

Overall, the poem thoughtfully explores complex emotional states with a distinctive voice, and refining clarity and imagery could strengthen its impact.

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Frederick Kesner

1 month 1 week ago

space watchers

unite!

Geezer

1 month 1 week ago

Whoa...

I've been deep with you, before, but I've got to admit,
I'm treading water, looking for the shore.
This is so succinct, yet... wonderfully deep and metaphorical. ~ Geez.

Frederick Kesner

1 month 1 week ago

even when deep calls to deep

the shore definitely has its charm and season!

This poem is a working through of a sequence of small instructions, each opening a different atmosphere.

The metaphors aren’t there to explain feelings; they’re the material the instructions move through,

hopefully moving the reader from letting go → remembering → noticing → kindling.

Not emotionally, but procedurally.

Its aim is to journey through weather (external pressure), growth (past attachments), perception (present cognition),

and seasonal temperament (future possibility).

Thanks so much, G. Perhaps the tides shall continue to be kind and flow with our clime. ~Freddy

Rula

1 month ago

Hello Fredrick

I know we met before , but I don't think I've read something such an abstract and deep from your pen .

I admit I had to google some words and this something that I absolutely like to do.

I just woold appreciate it if you can help me out here as how it's related to the contest's title..

Anyway, I really enjoyed the part that I got . Maybe I need to read it more and more to get the full picture clearer?

Thank you for sharing. as always!

Frederick Kesner

1 month ago

Hey there, Rula

Yes, we have. So many moons ago. How have you been. I agree with you. And it is my deep conviction that if words aren't used actively, they will definitely become archaic. But for the most part it is a real tight rope feat and could blow up in one's face as has often been the case. So, thank you so much for giving this piece a chance. Most grateful to you. 🙏🕊️