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BA-A-A-A-A-A-AD BOBBY
a man ate a can every night
thinking surely, it's healthy and right
when they choked up his throat
he then spoke like a goat
yet the dope recommends it despite!
A man who was serving the president
had alien worms as a resident
though he made them insane
they remained in his brain
cuz they craved the cocaine laced with feculent
About This Poem
Last Few Words: Not sure of the word pronunciation for "feculent" in it's original form, (feces) the first e is long. One of the internet pronunciation of this particular form of the word is a short e sound. (I find that the more information is available, the more contrary the "white" information is. I suppose artificial intelligence will be plagued with the same issues.) Anyway, have at it...
Style/Type: Structured: Western
Review Request Direction:
What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
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Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - polished draft
Comments
John Leslie O'Kelley
5 months 1 week ago
Triskelion
A very clever write, I'm into micro biology so I understand about the worms. I thought it very amusing. If you get the time please comment on my poem. Leslie.
Candlewitch
5 months 1 week ago
Dear Thomas,
R. Kennedy is one strange dude. I think you have captured the situation beautifully! (though somehow he frightens me)
always, Cat