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«Much Better, Isn’t It?
I’m far too busy to hear religious lies,
Licking pork from plates while charity’s on the line.
He draws his prayers in a white, thin line—
And I run my life while you chase the divine.
I see the void without a magnified view,
You really thought dreams get stitched and that’s truth?
Oh my God—you’re just another part
Of a system run by hollow hearts.
Another puppet, born and bred,
No better than a thousand dead.
No, I don’t pray—
You heard me right.
I drink, I dance on tabletops at night.
I live out loud, in honest light.
I help the broken, feel what’s fresh.
I give, I feel, I don’t confess.
I’m right where I was meant to be—
Painting smiles,
Setting hearts free.
I don’t judge their taste or song—
I cook their meals,
I play along.
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Comments
Candlewitch
5 months 1 week ago
Hello Niko,,
I have read this poem several times, now. With each new read, I find something new with which I relate to. It resonates deeply with my philosophies and past trials and tribulations. In this read through; these lines hit me, like a giant light bulb going off in my head:
Oh my God—you’re just another part
Of a system run by hollow hearts.
Another puppet, born and bred,
No better than a thousand dead.
welcome to Neopoet, please keep posting your poems and read other member's poem/works. I think your poetry will have found a home here!
Sincerely, Cat
ROCKY Tlaelane
5 months 1 week ago
My mom says religion is what…
My mom says religion is what
Makes your heart light
If painting smile
Setting heart free do the work for you
Cheers mama
I see a young person in every line is great
L o v e w o r n
5 months 1 week ago
Welcome along Niko
Sounds like if there is god he is on your side.
Well penned poetry,
Mark
👍
Shamo
4 months 2 weeks ago
Freedom!!!!
Well written piece. People will always judge those who live free, but don't realize it's that very freedom that allows them to love without condition, to feel deeper than just the surface of empathy.