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Rhyme Patterns (2) "Bitter rand Sweet" Scribbler
BITTER AND SWEET (rhyme patterns SS)
O the wonders of the spring
all the song birds perched to sing
a wasp just stung me on the ass
I've got to cut the freakin' grass
With flowers blooming everywhere
I've more than enough love to share
pollen swells my nose and eyes
new fire ant mounds which I despise
Ladies' fashions become spare
belly buttons and midriffs bare
along with men's knobby knees
plumbers' butts shine in the breeze
The cold of winter days long gone
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'ere long pleasant weather will be done
replaced by heat (now that's a bummer)
and unrelenting southern summer
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Rhyme Patterns (2) "Bitter and Sweet" revision by Feign
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oh, the beauty of springtime,
just got stung on my behind
birds laugh (on a branch I'll cut)
first spring mowing, swollen butt
bee filled flowers , got a lot
(ha ! some chicks will think I'm hot)
forsooth! Forgot my allergies!
fire ants have found my knees !
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this the season to see skin
breasts and thongs seem to be in
as are ant bitten old man legs
wow, plumbers butts look quite well fed
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winter never seemed so dear
yet for now I'll drink more beer
stung, bitten, sunstroke woes
yeah, a keg seems apropos
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14 TueReceived a critique
on Rhyme Patterns (2) "Bitter rand Sweet" Scribbler from @judyanne
"that you have made this even more sing-songy than scribblers original :) the aabb scheme tends to do this also if you lengthen the lines a little i think it would help in you quest love judy xxx" -
13 MonReceived a critique
on Rhyme Patterns (2) "Bitter rand Sweet" Scribbler from @scribbler
"Other than 1 use of near rhyme you have used the exact same rhyme pattern I used in the original. You did well in changing the lines without losing the content but the aim of the revision is supposed to be to change the…" -
13 MonPosted a poem
Rhyme Patterns (2) "Bitter rand Sweet" Scribbler
"BITTER AND SWEET (rhyme patterns SS)" -
13 MonReceived a critique
on RHYME PATTERN 1 WORKSHOP-Les Fleurs Parlent from @judyanne
"it's not particularly sing-songy however i'll be interested in how this one gets re-written love judy xxx" -
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- July 2012
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25 WedFirst critique offered
on "Sewn" (since unpublished) by @Grazziii3
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19 ThuFirst publication
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July 2012 — 6 poems
About Me
About me
Inspiration can be a word heard that gets caught up in images, a sight seen, the briefest feeling, happy or sad, the joy felt. Madness, illness, sorrow, there is no end to inspiration for me, I find life to be continuously inspiring.
Location: Florida, USA
Favorite Poets
I can not continue this farce. I have no particular favorite poem. I like a lot of stuff
sometimes I have a favorite for a day or so. Sometimes a particular line will haunt me. I never "studied" poetry
read much of the classics
nor do I feel a burning need to. Mea maxima culpa (just in case..)
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| RHYME PATTERNS (part 1) let's begin | (syllabus) | Wading Pool | Started 2012-08-07 | Concluded |