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Kajiko
Member since May 11, 2022
Member for 4 years
ORISON: Now And For The After
First Tell:
I grew in bits and in pieces, subject to grieve and uneasiness, I saw the stars, dreamt of them, wished for the moon, desired the sun. But cuncurrently, my past was my only adversary, my only competition, I knew all I needed was FAITH, I was so sure my convictions and beliefs were at best the only team I had. The only option in this very time of my need was to only but take a step, and so I took it and left everything in the fateful hands of the morrow.
Second Tell:
But now I have seen and I'm sure that the morrow was never intended for me. But then I couldn't say never to the resilience and undying spirit I harboured towards my trials and my troubles to make my mark, I wished for myself to do more, to be more, and to mean more than my reality. And then suddenly, a thought: from yesterday found me, dusted and fed my imaginations, and then I thought; Why not? Was my yesterday that ugly? Is it still seemingly that ugly? So I resorted to visiting her: A first for me.
She and I, Us:
I met her, but then again something she said struck me, she said: "Has there ever been an answer amidst arrogance? And even if there ever was, was it ALIVE? Is it still LIVING?"
Third Tell:
And then my mortality and limitations were made bare right before my very eyes, my wisdom was somewhat anulled and rendered inconsequential to her might and majesty. And then, I was a FOOL yet again for trusting and making friends with a total stranger out of a thought of which shape-shifted itself into a kind spirit, and tricked me into believing that assumptions were never costly.
Fourth Tell:
And so, I sorrowfully gaited right back to my reality and met so much more than was ever existent, just there, waiting for me with my own share of corrections and leftover uncommitted choices and decisions at hand lingering in an around my very being, and AGAIN! A thought came: Don't you think tomorrow might be better? Why not only but TRY!
Tell of Realisation:
And then immediately, I stood to face with my own mind and betraying imaginations and decided to make a HOME out from that uncomfortable and itchy burrow of mine, that reality,, to do and make it through to the morrow, notwithstanding my troubles and their relatively destructive elements.
Kajiko’s timeline
- May 2023
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11 ThuAnniversary
One year of membership
- May 2022
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22 Sun
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22 SunFirst contest commendation
Neopoem Of The Week May 15-22, 2022
with the poem "Myself, The Horizon, And The Sun".
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20 FriReceived a critique
on ORISON: Now And For The After from @Race_9togo
"Your title is okay, but I think Prayer would be better than orison. Your language use is good...but it's way too wordy. You can do better, by cutting out superfluous words. The cadence and pacing of this poem is bad. As…" -
20 Fri
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20 FriReceived a critique
on Myself, The Horizon, And The Sun from @Ray Whitaker
"As a prose poem, this piece worked for me. Some prose poems leave me unsatisfied, however yours did satisfy. I am looking forward to reading more of your work. you can edit your piece using the Neopoet software on this…" -
16 MonReceived a critique
on Assuasive from @scribbler
"It might be helpful for you to put the explanation in author's notes and thus avoid having to explain it again" -
16 MonReceived a critique
on Assuasive from @scribbler
"I suspect the word "tell" means something different to you than it does to me. If so please explain your meaning. Poetic prose is rare here on site and in my opinion that is what this is. Now I'm not saying it is a bad…" -
16 Mon
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16 MonReceived a critique
on Myself, The Horizon, And The Sun from @Candlewitch
"I feel I must apologize to you for my appraisal of your last poem. I didn't realize this was your particular style of writing. I like the title, it is imaginative and jumps off the page. I. the assessment of your situat…" -
16 Mon
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15 SunReceived a critique
on Assuasive from @Race_9togo
"This is what we do here at Neopoet, teaching each other to become better poets. I completely agree, art need not be explained, and should not be. That is why I hestitated, in editing The First Tell. But Neopoet is first…" -
14 SatReceived a critique
on Assuasive from @Race_9togo
"Welcome to Neopoet. I like the title, your language use is very good, The cadence ( rhythm) is not very good, I like the theme very much, The beggining and ending are good, The internal logic is good too. Your poem fail…" -
14 Sat
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14 Sat
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11 WedFirst publication
Reincarnation: Subtle As It Is
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11 Wed
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11 WedJoined Neopoet
Membership begins
First poem published 1 days later.
About Me
I am first a writer to the brink.
An Artist
An Empath.
A Conversationist,
and accommodating.
Location: Jos, Nigeria, NGA
Recent Work
ORISON: Now And For The After
CONSIGNMENT: A Respiratory Light
Myself, The Horizon, And The Sun
Assuasive
Reincarnation: Subtle As It Is
Contest Wins
| Winning Submission | Contest | Contest Date |
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| Myself, The Horizon, And The Sun | Neopoem Of The Week May 15-22, 2022 | – |