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Oluwatobi
Member since April 27, 2022
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THE DAY OUR TROUBLE BEGAN
Freedom!!! We chanted out as one,
Let the slavery of our children be ended, we say
We battled, we restricted and we conquered.
We formed our government in our castle,
ruled by ourselves for decades,
moments of ecstasy beclouded our faces,
Agriculture was at its peak,
Tolerance was at equilibrium,
We followed our religion wisely;
No religion was greater than another;
We internalized the notions of love, peace and security;
and we were our brother’s keeper.
The day our trouble began
was the day the wheat grown with tares,
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without harvesters separating truth from falsehood.
The day our trouble began
was the day we began comparing our differences,
rather than accepting them,
The day we compared the son of Akara seller to a Senator’s son,
The same day our trouble began.
The day our trouble began
was the day we compared a Muslim’s forehead
to a Christian’s knees,
When we regarded one religion as superior than another.
The day our trouble began
was the day we speak ill of a brother,
to undermine his aspiration,
The day a single person conceived to cart away
what is meant for many for himself,
The same day our trouble began!
The day our trouble began
was a day cursed under the scorching sun,
we grieved like they which have no hope,
O Liberty! Which we acclaimed,
If thou could be named again,
let emancipation from this trying day,
come rushing on the breeze!
Oluwatobi’s timeline
- April 2023
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27 ThuAnniversary
One year of membership
- January 2023
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12 Thu
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12 ThuFirst critique offered
on "Unstoppable" by @Shelby Pryor
- December 2022
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18 Sun
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18 SunReceived a critique
on THE DAY OUR TROUBLE BEGAN from @Candlewitch
"well stated and written!!! *hugs, Cat" -
18 Sun
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17 SatContest commendation
Neopoem Of The Week Contest December 11th to 17th 2022
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17 SatFirst contest commendation
Neopoem Of The Week Contest December 11th to 17th 2022
with the poem "THE DAY OUR TROUBLE BEGAN".
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15 Thu
- August 2022
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07 SunReceived a critique
on HEAL OUR LAND from @Dystopia
"Hi there! This poem is a really deep and thought-provoking work. I really liked your use of real-life relevant examples in your poem, as well as the repetition of certain words for emphasis. One suggestion.. sometimes y…" -
04 Thu
- May 2022
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05 ThuReceived a critique
on "Before Dusk" from @Candlewitch
"in S1 L3: "Awakening man from their realm of slumbering into reality," you could make these changes: "Awakening man from (his) realm of slumbering into reality," or use: Awakening (men) from their realm of slumbering in…" -
05 ThuReceived a critique
on "Before Dusk" from @Race_9togo
"From Nigeria, huh? You got some big shoes to fill, my young friend, with great poets like Nana Asma’u, Chinua Achebe (one of my favorites) and Tolu Akinyemi (Poetolu). I like what your trying to do here. I like it very…" -
04 WedFirst publication
"Before Dusk"
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04 Wed
- April 2022
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27 WedJoined Neopoet
Membership begins
First poem published 7 days later.
About Me
About me
I'm Adepoju Oluwatobi Adeola, a poet, writer, and an Essayist
Location: Nigeria, Abuja, NGA
Recent Work
Contest Wins
| Winning Submission | Contest | Contest Date |
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| THE DAY OUR TROUBLE BEGAN | Neopoem Of The Week Contest December 11th to 17th 2022 | – |