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tired_goat
Member since February 25, 2011
Member for 15 years, 3 months
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CONCRETE
the sun hidden behind a cloud of organza
the moon hood shadowing on the skyline
of tarmac, sings a ballad of loose fists
after holding tight for a whole collapse of the night
a car pours and pulls out like a water drop
on the highway – street lights
so yellow flicker into Dickens fate
and the Moby Dick is me, upstanding
on white guidelines of foreverness
we picked up our bikes
letting the wind through our hair like fingers of lovers
straining to hold us back, she pulled at our tires
as a hill built in front of us
unveiling
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the shining carcus of skyscrapers and wailers
only waiting
to become the derelict mountains of golden chains and
lock smithed articulations – I have to learn to pick locks
and buy some chain cutters
(with cameras as old as our mothers
I mourn the tarmac takeover
and epidemic of takeaway forests that live
within someone’s papers)
he can see the grave is dug, all we must do
is prod through the chasm of dirt to read the grave stone.
the clouds poured onto the ground
the sunlight stopped for a moment
and everything went blue
tired_goat’s timeline
- February 2026
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25 WedAnniversary
15 years of membership
- February 2021
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5 years of membership
- February 2012
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25 SatAnniversary
One year of membership
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18 SatReceived a critique
on where is utopia? from @Roscoe Lane
"I agree with Mark this is well written, but i believe Utopia is in man's mind. Find peace find Utopia, and stress is an invention of modern day society. Great poem Regards Roscoe.." -
18 SatReceived a critique
on CONCRETE from @Roscoe Lane
"Reads just like a concrete jungle and how people have become robotic in life.. I love the line_ a car pours and pulls out like a water drop on the highway. Gives a true feeling of a cars size compared to the planet. I t…" -
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29 SunReceived a critique
on UNTITLED (FOR HOLLY) from @wesley snow
"Performance allows a poet to express his poetry as he hears it. The curse of the written word is that we must use the tools available (punctuation, meter, line breaks, whatnot) to aid the reader to "hear" what we have c…" -
29 SunReceived a critique
on FRENCH PRESS, PANAMA ‘ESMERELDAH GEISHA’ from @Geezer
"when I first wake! I can't drink regular coffee anymore, but have found a very good De-caf. and I still love the taste of coffee! All those sensuous thoughts flowing through our heads when we enjoy something so much! I…" -
28 SatReceived a critique
on UNTITLED (FOR HOLLY) from @scribbler
"I know the choices listed for what type poem is being posted are limited. You list this as free vers. Is that because the type of poetry you think it is is not among the choices given? There are all kinds of poetry and…" -
28 SatReceived a critique
on UNTITLED (FOR HOLLY) from @wesley snow
"Even though it may get pottery thrown at me. I loved the language, but be it line breaks, meter, whatever, the piece didn't always feel like a poem. wesley" -
28 SatPosted a poem
FRENCH PRESS, PANAMA ‘ESMERELDAH GEISHA’
"I opened your liquid dawn with my ring finger" -
27 FriReceived a critique
on UNTITLED (FOR HOLLY) from @scribbler
"I am far from an expert but this reads as poetic prose to me. Not exactly the words I would have chosen to use but they Are specific and leave little to the imagination. Now I'll sit back and let the experts berate me f…" -
27 FriReceived a critique
on UNTITLED (FOR HOLLY) from @wesley snow
"Hey Goat. This is the first of yours I have read. I don't like free verse, so it's a little difficult for me to hear poetry in it, but I gotta say I loved the word play. Is this typical of your poetry or a unique direct…" -
27 FriCritiqued
"Holding Back" by @China Blue
"yeesh. I didn't mean it like that. I never have been telling you what to do, nor suggested I'm better than you or whatever. I know this is a workshop, I've admitted that before; all I'm suggesting is that you pay attent…" -
26 ThuCritiqued
"Holding Back" by @China Blue
"what a kerfuffle! look, whether or not you posted this just for the sake of it's meter, what I (and the rest of Neopoet) will read is quite likely something more than that. one's posting on a poetry site opens your poem…" -
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24 TueCritiqued
"Holding Back" by @China Blue
"Do you at least see what my metaphor was trying to illustrate?" -
24 TueCritiqued
"SPARE PARTS --updated" by @Geremia
"the phrasing and rhythm I imagine don't necessarily match the way you have formatted it. the second stanza for example; I wonder as I am near.done did I do what I was meant to do or did I steal the years of another just…" -
24 TueCritiqued
"Holding Back" by @China Blue
"well you've got me on the spot there. I'm not saying I disliked your poetry, by the way, I just meant that it's a common theme right now and therefore hard to be original - and originality is something I value. nor am I…" -
24 Tue
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24 TueCritiqued
"SPARE PARTS --updated" by @Geremia
"as if you are only revealing the tip of a very emotional iceberg - which I enjoyed. The simplicity of the poem is at times elegant, but also a little clunky. I enjoyed the metaphors weaved through your words very much." -
24 TueCritiqued
"D I S H E V E L L M E N T S O F H O A R D E R " by @Esker
"comments, I seem to understand the fluidity of your writing better. tastes nice." - February 2011
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26 SatFirst critique offered
on "absolute nothings" (since unpublished) by @Kailashana2
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26 SatNew follower
@Kailashana
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26 SatFirst publication
Sweetness
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26 Sat
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25 FriJoined Neopoet
Membership begins
First poem published 1 days later.
About Me
Location: AUS
Favorite Poets
E.E. Cummings
Charles Bukowski
Saul Williams
Rives
Notorious B.I.G.
Rumi
Recent Work
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Workshops
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| Working With Titles | (syllabus) | Wading Pool, Splash Pool | Started 2012-01-30 | Concluded |