ThisIsMe

Member since October 10, 2019

Member for 6 years, 7 months

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9 Poems

21 Comments

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My Saving Sea

Posted Aug 31, 2020 · 13 lines · 1 critiques

Great ocean of uncertainty

What secrets do you hold?

What wonders have you spoken of

What lies have you told?

We sail so far without a clue

Beyond your dazzling shore...

To leave behind our fears and doubts

Hoping we find more.

What can save our wayward souls

From what we used to be?

All we’ve found from sailing far

Is that it cannot be the sea.

ThisIsMe’s timeline

October 2024
10 Thu

Anniversary
5 years of membership
October 2020
10 Sat

Anniversary
One year of membership
September 2020
01 Tue

Received a critique
on My Saving Sea from @Gracy
"Hi ThisIsMe, I have not read your poems before. This one is haunting, makes one think. The title and content are interesting, I'm not sure about your final two verses. Maybe you can tell us. There's a fantastic book by…"
August 2020
31 Mon

Posted a poem
My Saving Sea
"Great ocean of uncertainty"
Open thread 13 lines
January 2020
01 Wed

Received a critique
on Supersaturated from @Sparrow 42
"A great write just be careful of writing about something that isn't true.. I am a sponge, I absorb.. Nothing passes through me.. A natural sponge has holes that go right through it. So I would put that line as:- I am a…"
01 Wed

Received a critique
on To My Dead Love from @Geezer
"Then you will appreciate my upcoming chat room. My co-host Carrie and I will be hosting a chat called Chat on the Darkside! It is something I used to do a few years ago before we had a big crash and we lost our chat. De…"
01 Wed

Critiqued
"Chasing Stars..." by @Geezer
"Love this work, your word choice and style really speak to me. I love how it sounds like you're just writing down what you're thinking and then go back to fine-tune it. It makes the piece seem very authentic."
December 2019
31 Tue

Received a critique
on To My Dead Love from @Geezer
"simplistic poem that resonates with honesty about your feelings. The title interested me and brought me in. The logic seems to be good throughout and brings one to the end smoothly. The only thing is, it makes one think…"
31 Tue

Received a critique
on I from @Geezer
"as good as most of your other stuff! ~ Geezer. ."
31 Tue

Received a critique
on No Breath in Me from @Geezer
"of the Wizard of Oz and a combo of scarecrow and tinman; both of who were persons, but not alive. If you get what I mean? ~ Geezer. ."
31 Tue

Received a critique
on Yours from @Geezer
"but this fits your style. I don't think that there are too many you's and me's. If you try to get rid of some or most of them, you will destroy the quickness of the work. I like it fine the way that it is! ~ Geezer. ."
31 Tue

Received a critique
on Twelve Lines from @Geezer
"Very well put together. I like the rewrite based on the critique. Good job! ~ Geezer. ."
30 Mon

Posted a poem
To My Dead Love
"Where is my body?"
Open thread 43 lines
November 2019
15 Fri

Posted a poem
I
"In a world full of sorrow, "
Open thread 18 lines
October 2019
31 Thu

Critiqued
"The Devils Pearls" by @c lynn brooks
"Love this poem, great language and word choice. I like the inconsistency in your rhyme 'pattern', it adds a unique character to the piece and makes it more intriguing. Great work!"
22 Tue

New follower
@Rottiestyl
19 Sat

Posted a poem
No Breath in Me
"I think about what I could be"
Open thread 10 lines
17 Thu

New follower
@c lynn brooks
17 Thu

Posted a poem
Yours
"You said you were sorry, "
Open thread 27 lines
15 Tue

Highest posting month
October 2019 — 5 poems
13 Sun

Critiqued
" The Demise Of A Witch (October Contest)" by @Patricia
"This is beautiful poem, I especially love your rhyme pattern and the lines "Perhaps she was dead some of them said" and "not daring to take chances instead". Maybe think about changing the word order of the line "they f…"
13 Sun

First critique offered
on " The Demise Of A Witch (October Contest)" by @Patricia
13 Sun

Posted a poem
My Leaves
"The seasons change but I remain the same"
Open thread 18 lines
11 Fri

Posted a poem
Twelve Lines
"One heart, one head, one voice"
Open thread 12 lines
10 Thu

First publication
Supersaturated
10 Thu

Most-discussed work
Supersaturated

14 critiques to date.
10 Thu

Posted a poem
Supersaturated
"I am a sponge, I absorb"
Open thread 25 lines
10 Thu

Joined Neopoet
Membership begins

First poem published 1 days later.