samary

Member since September 2, 2019

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I was lucky

Posted Jul 4, 2023 · 19 lines · 2 critiques

I have long known the click of keys,
the clack of heels and ‘hurr’ of laboured
breath as joggers slap
and cough down winding paths.

I know the taffeta rustle as trees
in full leaf betray the expectant breeze.
How familiar ferries blare through clanking yachts and how the slap and slosh
of their wake washes the harbour rocks.

I feel the ground beneath me tremble
as a passing subterranean train races on
and the old earth exhales through crackling grass.

I have known this city, but until now
I did not know this hand, weightless as fog
in the dip above my hip

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I did not know that in reverent silence
he would lean towards me
or how suddenly I would be kissed.
I know serendipity mixed with lucky fortune
Samantha

samary’s timeline

September 2024
02 Mon

Anniversary
5 years of membership
July 2023
04 Tue

Received a critique
on I was lucky from @Geezer
"on being lucky! I have a wonder, is the "He" the city? Or maybe where you met your partner? I like the line about the weightless hand of fog that rests in the dip before your hip. It fits, no matter the truth of identit…"
04 Tue

Posted a poem
I was lucky
"I have long known the click of keys,"
Open thread 19 lines
June 2021
11 Fri

Critiqued
"Your eyes of blue " by @Edward nigma
"Hi I wondered why you had chosen the line breaks in your piece for the visual appearance? For the reader breaking the lines in this way is a disruption to thought, I think it would read better as longer lines your enjam…"
11 Fri

Critiqued
"DROPPED BALL" by @Ray Whitaker
"Hi Ray I really like the content of this but I would like it to have more rhythm and flow get it more song like... There is good imagery but its sort of in big lumps.. I have taken some grave liberties with this and it…"
May 2021
10 Mon

Received a critique
on Days of Spring from @Ray Whitaker
"Thansk for telling me."
10 Mon

Critiqued
"holding it in or letting it out" by @scooby
"Its a nice love poem but it feels much more lyric than narrative to me. A rhymed poem with one unrhymed line its making a point but if you are using it as a standout then I would make ut more of a statement up the word…"
05 Wed

Received a critique
on Days of Spring from @Ray Whitaker
"A poem that describes a hunted animal... I found this very imteresting. Who is the pheasant in your life? The death so described..."
02 Sun

Critiqued
"Deleted: Narrative Shop: A Day In The Life Of... (edited) see added note!" by @Candlewitch
"A poem that flirts with the boundaries between lyric and narrative, I am not sure you have a beginning middle and end as in a story but you have an interesting set of reactions to a tornado. I think if you are doing a r…"
02 Sun

Critiqued
"Secret Humor... [Narrative workshop]" by @Geezer
"This works well as a narrative poem , you got a shudder from me at pancakes and peanut butter lol. A warm loving humorous incident that leaves the reader with a smile."
02 Sun

Critiqued
""Above Tree’s in Silhouette" - Narrative Workshop " by @ImageWeaver
"I love the full circle starting and finishing with the same image. I think its hard sometimes to write a purely narrative poem and I think your poem falls on the cusp between narrative and lyric but I like that. The son…"
02 Sun

Critiqued
"The Painter (Narrative Poetry Workshop)" by @Michael Anthony
"Interesting story of love and loss and a priceless reminder. I was wondering if it would be stronger if you changed the stanzas round a little and cut a few extraneous words. Just a suggestion feel free to ignore. This…"
April 2021
29 Thu

Posted a poem
Days of Spring
"Days of Spring"
Open thread 27 lines
29 Thu

New follower
@Ray Whitaker
February 2021
01 Mon

Received a critique
on Storm Trigger from @Rula
"Piece about a powerful creature (the sea) I also very much liked the mythological references and the I also liked the repeatetive lines. L.4... do you mean prison(ed) or freed. Very competitive piece. Best wishes in the…"
January 2021
30 Sat

Received a critique
on Storm Trigger from @Geezer
"that you might make this a little smoother: Waves [do] crash... Poseidon angry; this man blinded his son Winds to command, giving sails the right drift Death [and] worse as [spells] fill the air Bleak ocean depths hold…"
29 Fri

Received a critique
on Storm Trigger from @Ray Whitaker
"I think you just might win this month’s contest. Like the two line form a lot. Powerful!"
29 Fri

Received a critique
on Storm Trigger from @c lynn brooks
"Excellent poem your rhyme is spot on and your choice of topics is one of my favorites"
29 Fri

Posted a poem
Storm Trigger
"Waves crash on these rocky shores,"
Open thread 31 lines
November 2020
21 Sat

Received a critique
on Haiku from @Geezer
"who will not believe that what you have written is Haiku; because they subscribe to the notion that there is only one way to count the meter. [5-7-5] I suggest that they look at some of the masters work; like: Matsuo Ba…"
20 Fri

Posted a poem
Haiku
"winter spreading―"
Open thread 4 lines
September 2020
02 Wed

Anniversary
One year of membership
February 2020
28 Fri

Posted a poem
Light my Fire
"You said light my fire"
Open thread 13 lines
24 Mon

Critiqued
"THAT COUNTRY ROAD" by @scribbler
"To me this needs some polishing in several places. I am not sure about the flow of line 2 line 10 feels sort of half finished Stanza 3 with only one rhyme feels out of place are you trying to decompose the reader? I rat…"
20 Thu

Posted a poem
Poem for the Metre workshop
"Try this poem; remember to read it aloud;"
Open thread 36 lines
14 Fri

Posted a poem
Englyn Penfyr Rhythm and Metre workshop
"Your challenge members of the workshop and anyone else is write one of these post here and click the workshop box at the bottom to find the workshop label."
Open thread 24 lines
05 Wed

Posted a poem
Riding the Storm
" Riding the Storm"
Open thread 24 lines
January 2020
30 Thu

New follower
@Hannah Moonlark
29 Wed

Posted a poem
Longing
"You don't understand"
Open thread 27 lines
26 Sun

Posted a poem
Reading and Analysis of Poetry (not a poem)
"Reading and Analysing Poetry"
Open thread 34 lines
24 Fri

Posted a poem
Perception
"Stress takes its toll"
Open thread 26 lines
November 2019
23 Sat

Posted a poem
Compulsion Petrarchan Sonnet. November Competition
"I am the sensation of the century"
Open thread 15 lines
September 2019
18 Wed

New follower
@cathy mccormick
06 Fri

Most-discussed work
Amazon dispossessed (climate change)

12 critiques to date.
05 Thu

First critique offered
on "Climate Change (which one first or second)" by @lovedly
02 Mon

First publication
La Giralda (since unpublished)
02 Mon

Joined Neopoet
Membership begins

First poem published 1 days later.

About Me

About me

I am a poet, writer and poetry mentor.

Location: Uk, GBR

Contest Wins

This member has not yet won any contests.

Workshops

		Skill level:
NARRATIVE POETRY SHOP (Let's get started)	(syllabus)	Splash Pool	Started 2021-04-17	Concluded
Rhythm and Meter in Poetry	(syllabus)	Plunge Pool	Started 2020-02-10	Concluded
Critique For New And Old	(syllabus)	Plunge Pool	Started 2020-01-16	Concluded
Prose as poetry: the prose-poem	(syllabus)	Plunge Pool	Started 2019-12-04	Concluded
Immersing the Reader Via Imagery Part 2	(syllabus)	Splash Pool	Started 2019-09-22	Concluded
Immersing the reader via imagery (Let's get started)	(syllabus)	Splash Pool	Started 2019-09-16	Concluded

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cathy mccormick

Hannah Moonlark

Ray Whitaker

5 years of membership

on I was lucky from @Geezer

"Your eyes of blue " by @Edward nigma

"DROPPED BALL" by @Ray Whitaker

on Days of Spring from @Ray Whitaker

"holding it in or letting it out" by @scooby

on Days of Spring from @Ray Whitaker

"Deleted: Narrative Shop: A Day In The Life Of... (edited) see added note!" by @Candlewitch

"Secret Humor... [Narrative workshop]" by @Geezer

""Above Tree’s in Silhouette" - Narrative Workshop " by @ImageWeaver

"The Painter (Narrative Poetry Workshop)" by @Michael Anthony

on Storm Trigger from @Rula

on Storm Trigger from @Geezer

on Storm Trigger from @Ray Whitaker

on Storm Trigger from @c lynn brooks

on Haiku from @Geezer

One year of membership

"THAT COUNTRY ROAD" by @scribbler

on "Climate Change (which one first or second)" by @lovedly

La Giralda (since unpublished)

Membership begins

About Me

Recent Work

Contest Wins

Workshops

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