riotface97

Member since June 6, 2011

Member for 14 years, 11 months

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59 Poems

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Kintsugi

Posted Dec 21, 2021 · 24 lines · 4 critiques

She sees kintsugi
as I pour myself in every direction
like rain onto grass
self-doubt holding the tap
open.

Omnipresent dark
clouds the skies
clouds thoughts

her gold earrings sparkle in the dusk.

She grabs a cup.
I am an evoker of sympathy
and the glass overfloweth in her eyes.

I could kiss her if her lips allowed
follow her into her daydreams

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to the print of the world that lingers,
behind those hazelnut eyes.

Would we crisscross with commonalities?
Blurred images.
Abstract chains of thought.
Or are we worlds apart
Are we all just worlds apart?
And kissing is just a façade for the hopeful

She sees kintsugi
I see a broken man.

riotface97’s timeline

December 2021
29 Wed

Critiqued
"Glass Heart - Random Challenge #10" by @Abby
"First of all, the good. Language use was superb in parts, my favourite stanza was "Everything is fine now, that's the worst part- To go from the fireworks, the bursting bombs All the way down to nothing." Also loved you…"
29 Wed

Critiqued
"Missing You... " by @Geezer
"The line "I'm glad that your suffering is over, but I miss the hell out of you!" brought a tear to my eye. I am of the view that art and in general poetry offers a window into someone's soul, even though we don't know e…"
24 Fri

Received a critique
on Kintsugi from @Jackweb
"Riotface97 is very creative poet. The adoption of metaphor here is classic! At 20 your dictions are bullet. I wonder what would happen if you clock 25. I believe the poem, Kintsugi is the Japanese art of putting broken…"
24 Fri

New follower
@Jackweb
23 Thu

Received a critique
on Kintsugi from @lovedly
"take AGES KID"
21 Tue

Received a critique
on Kintsugi from @lovedly
"Kintsugi is the art of mending broken pottery with gold or silver Japanese believe that repairing a broken vessel is more appealing you seem to apply this kintsugi as a metaphor to unite broken hearts if so young aussie…"
21 Tue

Received a critique
on Kintsugi from @Geezer
"your best yet! I really enjoyed this one; after I looked up the title! Yes, there are those that see nothing but an opportunity to fix someone or something broken. They get great satisfaction in making something [or som…"
21 Tue

Critiqued
"EXEMPT (December poem to friends now gone)" by @scribbler
"I recognise some of the people you reference in this poem who too helped me along with my journey. Unfortunately I can't give much critique because I think it is a beautiful ode to some beautiful people. Personal and be…"
21 Tue

Critiqued
"cosmic love" by @arjiris.f.
"I really enjoyed the heart of this poem. Some of your language use "dampen the sky with stars" is very beautiful and elevates this piece. Personally celestial bodies didn't work for me or at least, it took away from the…"
21 Tue

Posted a poem
Kintsugi
"She sees kintsugi"
Open thread 24 lines
June 2021
06 Sun

Anniversary
10 years of membership
June 2020
03 Wed

Received a critique
on Spark. from @Gracy
"Hello Nick, I think you're new here? Welcome, I'm also fairly new. Neopoet is like a family, so I hope you feel at home posting your poems here. So sorry about your depression, that's certainly a difficult and long time…"
February 2019
14 Thu

Received a critique
on The Old Deep Blue. from @Geezer
"this has to do with depression and how it comes unbidden to ruin a life. Many people who do not know much about depression, will say; "Just buckle down, don't worry, be happy!" They don't understand that it isn't someth…"
14 Thu

Posted a poem
The Old Deep Blue.
"The old deep blue has come home again"
Open thread 33 lines
July 2018
30 Mon

Received a critique
on Graduating Class of 2015 from @weirdelf
"I went to an all boys school that was entrenched drenched in the cruelty of homophobia, racism and corporal punishment. In 2nd year (year 8) I held the dubious honour of most cuts of the cane received. I refused to buck…"
30 Mon

Received a critique
on Graduating Class of 2015 from @weirdelf
"I went to an all boys school that was entrenched drenched in the cruelty of homophobia, racism and corporal punishment. In 2nd year (year 8) I held the dubious honour of most cuts of the cane received. I refused to buck…"
30 Mon

New follower
@weirdelf
May 2018
20 Sun

Posted a poem
Graduating Class of 2015
"High school games to destroy a self."
Open thread 28 lines
April 2018
17 Tue

Critiqued
"Spring Snow, D.C., 2018 (Spring Contest)" by @Eumolpus
"Wow. I loved the way this turned the convention of Spring poetry being tied to romanticism (at least, in my mind it is) on its head. The language and syntax also comes off as carefully considered and masterful. Unfortun…"
17 Tue

Critiqued
"MIS- Loving Me" by @T. Harmonee
"Great read, there's a distinct poetic voice that I'm quite drawn to underlying this. In saying that, I have a few small suggestions that might bring that more to the forefront. I'd read it out loud a few times as that a…"
17 Tue

Posted a poem
The Alex Jones Show Ft. 20 Dead Kids.
"The Alex Jones Show Ft. 20 Dead Kids."
Open thread 22 lines
16 Mon

Critiqued
"Protean Rivers" by @fink555
"This piece makes me feel like I'm being taken on some pseudo-psychadelic journey, you have a very unique voice. I really like the way you evoked images here, and it all feels fresh, nothing comes off as overdone or forc…"
16 Mon

Posted a poem
Slipped
"Do you walk half-asleep through fortified daydreams like I do?"
Open thread 26 lines
December 2017
25 Mon

Critiqued
"Titanic...Only If Rose had Saved Jack!" by @lovedly
"Love the voice, as I do in most of your work. It's uninhibited and free in a way that reminds me of the beatniks. I especially loved the abrupt jump in the first stanza into, "Sink the titanic." I do, however (and if yo…"
24 Sun

Posted a poem
New
"And were we wrong?"
Open thread 35 lines
19 Tue

Posted a poem
This City does not care for Drunks or those with Fast-Paced Minds.
"The taxicab smells of stale beer and"
Open thread 28 lines
07 Thu

Posted a poem
So Hand me your Soul and your Love.
"And I don’t believe in second chances"
Open thread 10 lines
October 2017
19 Thu

Posted a poem
Round and Round and Round.
"Tie yourself up in knots again, then"
Open thread 31 lines
02 Mon

Posted a poem
X, Y, Z.
"Someone once told me I struggle with titles;"
Open thread 23 lines
September 2017
26 Tue

Posted a poem
Autumn disavowed.
"It’s your childhood home with the power out;"
Open thread 23 lines
25 Mon

Posted a poem
Late Night Drinks with the Queen of the Universe.
"A late night soiree with silence and sternness and silk-laced shoes"
Open thread 16 lines
July 2017
11 Tue

Most-discussed work
Ivan the Terrible and his Son - Canvas Print 1000 Words Contest.

11 critiques to date.
June 2016
06 Mon

Anniversary
5 years of membership
June 2015
01 Mon

First critique offered
on "Tintullate" by @Esker
May 2015
29 Fri

New follower
@lovedly
April 2015
15 Wed

Highest posting month
April 2015 — 7 poems
October 2013
01 Tue

First publication
Wild and free
June 2012
06 Wed

Anniversary
One year of membership
June 2011
06 Mon

Joined Neopoet
Membership begins

First poem published 848 days later.

About Me

About me

I'm 20, live in Aus studying arts (writing). I love poetry, and I think the cultural perception around its value as an art form is a little twisted. But nevertheless, as with all creative pursuits, it isn't for anyone else. It's for me. Fav book is Infinite Jest, favourite poet would be Bukowski.

Location: Australia, AUS

Favorite Poets

Plath (I know

slightly concerning)

E. E. Cummings

Tagore

Eliot

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Workshops

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lovedly

weirdelf

Jackweb

"Glass Heart - Random Challenge #10" by @Abby

"Missing You... " by @Geezer

on Kintsugi from @Jackweb

on Kintsugi from @lovedly

on Kintsugi from @lovedly

on Kintsugi from @Geezer

"EXEMPT (December poem to friends now gone)" by @scribbler

"cosmic love" by @arjiris.f.

10 years of membership

on Spark. from @Gracy

on The Old Deep Blue. from @Geezer

on Graduating Class of 2015 from @weirdelf

on Graduating Class of 2015 from @weirdelf

"Spring Snow, D.C., 2018 (Spring Contest)" by @Eumolpus

"MIS- Loving Me" by @T. Harmonee

"Protean Rivers" by @fink555

"Titanic...Only If Rose had Saved Jack!" by @lovedly

5 years of membership

on "Tintullate" by @Esker

April 2015 — 7 poems

One year of membership

Membership begins

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