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Jun 20, 2012
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HEART OF CHALK [Italian/ English]
CUORE DI GESSO
Avvicinati.
Vieni
ancora piu’ presso
a me.
Vedi nell’anima mia,.
Cuore di gesso.
Sa’ cos’è ammazzare,
HEART OF CHALK
Come closer
Come closer still.
Look into my soul.
Heart of chalk,
Know what it is to kill.
— Geremia, Jun 20, 2012
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Nordic cloud
14 years 1 month ago
Short and powerfully
Short and powerfully atmospheric,
the Italian wonderful in sound,
the chalk dust
gathered to snuff one out
in the depths of a brittle heart.
Anni
Ian.T
14 years 1 month ago
Joe
A power house in a few words well thought out...
Just the typo to correct in the last line as you have "IS" instead of "IT"
Hope you are doing ok out there Know that we are thinking of you, Yours Ian.T
judyanne
14 years 1 month ago
hi joe
very powerful
i like the repetition, (at least with the english version, i note the italian is different..)
this could be labelled tanka, i am sure
great write
love judy
xxx
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