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Introspection

                   Introspection



                Eye to I, my ego stares
                at what it should not see
                shadows of itself that never last
                images it never shares
                with anyone but me
                ghosts that dwell in mirrors of the past

                Voraciously, my soul devours
                food it should not crave
                and slakes its thirst with unfamiliar wine
                dreaming of forbidden hours
                that it could not save
                believing that its purpose was divine

                Silently I scream my hate
                for what I cannot be
                and shed my blood for what I never was
                knowing all the while that fate
                is still deluding me
                into thinking justice is the cause

                Then, as I embrace the pain
                of my reality,
                and realize that vainity is blind,
                I face my ego once again
                with sheer humility
                and marvel at the truth I come to find


                C.  Lon  R.  Bruso
               
               
— Lonnie, Jul 19, 2010

About This Poem

About the Author

Region, Country: New England, originally, now, Macon, N.C., USA

Favorite Poets: Poe, Frost, Bob Dylan

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LZ

Lil Z

15 years 10 months ago

A great write!

It was very well written, the flow is different on this one, at first I thought the third line in each stanza broke the rhythm, however, reading it over a couple more times I see that the entirety of each stanza goes together nicely. Perhaps I'm just not very use to this style. There's one tiny error in this one, on the fourth stanza, line three, I think you mean "vanity", you must have accidentally misspelled it without noticing. Great write though, glad to see you back writing!
weirdelf

weirdelf

15 years 10 months ago

At first I thought this poem was just a whinge

but thelast 3 lines redeem it, a very fine write. and realize that vainity[vanity] is blind, By the way, since you refuse to help other poets with feedback I decided not to comment on your poems any more. But I can't resist it. You are so fucking good. But please try, so many young poets could value from your help. Cheers, Jess, Praise helps no poet, have the courage and generousity to give critique.
SH

shirley harrison

15 years 10 months ago

"Ego"

This is truly Inspiring, not just looking at the ego but questioning it! Dearest Lonnie, wonderful write, with much love shirl.... shirley harrison