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Daddy's Rose Garden

 


My father, planted a rose garden for me
Scents of pure love, plentiful colors to see
Toiled his hands both day and night
Beneath earths soil, many roots of color
blooming into the mornings sunlight

Gentleness of care, he tenders the bush
for a rose is an art, a splendor of looks
He planted this rose garden just for me
to share with all, pure and tenderly
Red and white, the peach and the yellow
good morning,  my most precious petals

They're a wonder to me, I watch them grow
for my gardener tends to them well you know
I love my roses, so fragrant they smell
the love of my father, he planted them well
Admiration for a rose, is love indeed
fragrants to soften a warm summer breeze

Scents so sweet, I just want to say
I love you Daddy, for planting them your way
no finer is the rose, that is planted with love
Showers in colors, heaven scents from above
a sight and the fragrance, so happy with glee
Thank you dear father, my gardener is He.

mms 7.19.10.



To my father who planted a beautiful garden of roses on July 4th and how sweet it lis.

— magics02, Jul 18, 2010

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magics02

15 years 10 months ago

I know

I need to come back to this for some tweaks. Will do some more as time permits, Off to outside now..
faithmairee

faithmairee

15 years 10 months ago

Lovely Poem To You Dad

I bet your garden is just beautiful! What a lovely poem to your Dad. Can't wait to visit it again once you are done tweaking it. Love-Faith ~If you can't help someone atleast ways don't hurt them.~
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magics02

15 years 10 months ago

Thank you Faith

As soon as the blooms appear all together I will post a picture for all to see. Thank you for the visit as always and the comments. Love- Mona
Nordic cloud

Nordic cloud

15 years 10 months ago

Oh I can smell their scent, hmmmm!

Ann of Norway With what delicious sweet the words you throw like petals onto the page, scented with the love of your father, the gardener who planted them with love too; how beautiful to picture and almost experience through your poem Magic Mona, you truly send the messages that roses dream of doing, in your words. With my love Ann'uccia' One tweak so far the "sun light" sunlight!
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magics02

15 years 10 months ago

Yes that is correct

It is funny how I change the words up and back and then it appears you found this one right on track. I did some tweaking to it and fixed the sunlight to come back as one word, one rose I send to you this day sweet snowlady of Norway. Hugs and kisses across the seas Mona Magics xoxoxo
Bonitaj

Bonitaj

15 years 10 months ago

Hello Mona!

Interesting piece - right up to the end I thought you were writing to your Heavenly Father and I expected to see a capital H for "my gardener is He". could have worked both ways... Regards Boni
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magics02

15 years 10 months ago

Thank you dear Boni

Like I just stated to Ann I had that word with a cap also and I just went into change it but am still unsure if it needs to be capped. That is so great you caught the double read of this poem as you got it spot on!! I so appreciate you sharing your thoughts of this piece with me sincerely. My Father yes and my Father heavenly, you caught the very essence of the entire write. Daddy did do the rose bushes and the love he put into it was so sweet. Soon as I get a full pic I shall display for all to see. Thank you fine lady Love,Mona Magics xoxoxo
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scribbler

15 years 10 months ago

garden

what a lovely write of scarce shared time.I hope you don't mind 2 tiny suggestion that might reinforce this work's sentiment. line 4:delete "for" line 15:delete comma and"he" hope these little suggestions are of use.......scribbler
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magics02

15 years 10 months ago

Thank you Scribe

For your visit and comments. I worked with line 15 but could not delete the comma for it is a long line without it and the he just has to be there. I reworked this one more tonite let me know your thoughts of it if you will and I thank you so. Love at ya guy Mona Magics02
Dennis Go

Dennis Go

15 years 10 months ago

Awesome!

Nice rhyming and rhythm! Wonderful sentiments here!
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magics02

15 years 10 months ago

Thank you for your visit

To my write of the love in my heart for my dad as he planted these rose bushes for me. I so appreciate your words and comments. Love back at ya guy Mona Magics
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itzhak bareket

15 years 10 months ago

love garden

itzhak bareket ....the flowers are here , i can see , smell and enjoy them.... thank you dear daughter ...tell your father please , that i love him , and i learned from him and his beloved daughter , a lot . best wishes , itzhak bareket .
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magics02

15 years 10 months ago

I thank you so much

for the visit and the beautiful comments you left to this piece of mine. I shall tell my dad exactly your sentiments I recieved here. It is also very nice to meet you tonite. I was so happy to recieve such a lovely comment as such. Love Mona Magics xoxoxo
LZ

Lil Z

15 years 10 months ago

Beautiful poem Mona!

I loved the reference, the language was superb made it very enjoyable! You're Mona The Eloquent! Sincerely, Lil Z
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magics02

15 years 10 months ago

Lil Z I write to thee

So happy to see you on my page a delight it is for the comments you share I find to you my little dear:) Thank you Lil Z and I have not forgotten you and the song. As always to see you grace my page is a delight. Will visit you soon Love, Mona Magics xoxoxo