in love

ohmygod!
i've said too
much already
but it doesn't
make things
any less true

you have been
more kind to me
than what i
really think
that i deserve

when i look at you
i know that what
i see is good and
i do want you

it's mystical
when i'm in love
i think i can
do most anything
(don't you?)

it's madness
when i can't
have what i want
i often dream
about getting it
(do you?)

— faithmairee, Jul 17, 2010

About the Author

Region, Country: Florida, United States, USA

Favorite Poets: Lawrence Ferlinghetti, Edna St. Vincent Millay, Lucille Clifton and Elizabeth Bishop

Critiques

Seren

16 years ago

Dear Faith

True Passion finds the madness in love loved your poem ... well done love and hugs JayCee (“To be yourself in a world that is constantly trying to make you something else is the greatest accomplishment.” ~ Ralph Waldo Emerson quote)

Seren

16 years ago

Btw I would space the

Btw I would space the OHMYGOD in the first line ... just looks untidy and not edited ... but wait till you get other comments everyone else might think I am wrong lol I sometimes am, ok a lot lol love JayCee (“To be yourself in a world that is constantly trying to make you something else is the greatest accomplishment.” ~ Ralph Waldo Emerson quote)

faithmairee

16 years ago

Thank You, JayCee

Dear JayCee-Thank you for your wonderful words. I wrote the first line like that on purpose. Others may agree with you though. Thanks for your kind attention to my poem. Love-Faith ~I never say anything I don't mean nor do I say anything to be mean.~

scribbler

16 years ago

love

unrequited love can drive one mad.Method of writing first line IS dependent on import implied.I think you mean to downplay it which is fine......scribbler

faithmairee

16 years ago

Thank You, Stan

I see you understood my purpose and thank you for your wonderful remarks. I always appreciate what you have to say. Have a wonderful weekend! Love-Faith ~If you can't help someone atleast ways don't hurt them.~

xena465

16 years ago

Dear Faith

A great write, but I have to agree with JayCee. I understand why you wish to write it this way though. Xena Quote: Science is what you know; philosophy is what you don't know. - Bertrand Russell

faithmairee

16 years ago

Thank you, Xena

Thanks, Xena Love-Faith ~If you can't help someone atleast ways don't hurt them.~

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