Bonitaj

Jul 16, 2010 ⭐ See this poem's read count — a supporter feature

STONED FOR LOVE

A new flame. Molten words wax

a  slow dripping.

Cold comfort to one still spluttering from  the tearful storm coming in. Doubts.Smaller shadows loom,lingering lightbegins to dim,whispered promises haltering,forever falteringas black darkness sets in.  "Let hewho is without sincaste the first stone"*Let he who has known only Loveprofess redemption alone -for it falls to him to slay

the one,who has no guilt to atone.  BjR 16 July '10 *taken from the New Testament where a group of men were about to stone a woman, a well known custom at the time.

— Bonitaj, Jul 16, 2010

About the Author

Region, Country: Tip of Southern Africa, ZAF

Favorite Poets: Too many to narrow down, but briefly :, AUDEN, T.S. ELIOT, DICKENSON, RILKE, THOREAU, RUMI ... the list is endless. Am inspired by many, especially those that live lives of "quiet desperation, and go to the grave with a song still in them" (THoreau)

Critiques

Seren

16 years ago

Dear Bonni

You know I dont do this often but I was compeled to offer my version of this one so here it is had a minute and writing relaxes the mind thanks for the indulgence I hope you didnt mind too much An Old flame Melting words to wax found in the slow drip is cold comfort to one that is still spluttering from a tearful storm coming in. of these Doubts are smaller shadows born. and a Lingering light begins to dim. with whispered promises haltering, and forever faltering as the black darkness sets in. “Let he who is without sin caste the first stone”* Let he who has known Love profess redemption alone - for it fails him to slay the one who has no guilt to stone. my version love and big hugs JayCee x x x (Quote~~"It is by universal misunderstanding that all agree. For if, by ill luck, people understood each other, they would never agree. "--Charles Baudelaire)

Bonitaj

16 years ago

Love it!

and thank you!! In my rush to post there was a definate need for clarity. Just one question - check the last line please! THanks Jay-Cee! Much appreciated! Boni

Seren

16 years ago

Just fixed it while you were

Just fixed it while you were typing lovely lol I noticed I had 'of' instead of 'to' it was meant to be to lol glad you didnt mind ... I dont always feel compeled but I loved this one :) love JayCee x x x (Quote~~"It is by universal misunderstanding that all agree. For if, by ill luck, people understood each other, they would never agree. "--Charles Baudelaire)

Lonnie

16 years ago

Beautifully written, and boldly spoken!

An intriguing piece filled with heartfelt sentiment and bold defiance! I was pleased to read it, and am honored to applaud it!

shirley harrison

16 years ago

Dear Bonita!

just incredible, i will go with Lonnie on this one as he has said it perfectly! with much love shirley harrison

Bonitaj

16 years ago

Thank you both so much!

Lonnie, I think my defiance lies purely in the fact that I shan't be "correcting" or changing the format of the piece as I wrote it. I had concerns around whether it would be comprehensible as it stood, so I was glad to have Jay-Cee break it down for others. For you who have so captured it into your own imaginations - I thank most kindly! Boni

loved

16 years ago

i just posted

a summary of all comments received First is avoid all caps please the rest u may or may not read as u alone have to cast the first stone so i no more can and do plead

Bonitaj

16 years ago

Ok Loved

I see your comment above - but if you look closely it relates to punctuation and new sentences - hence the need for Caps. Sorry - don't wish to change those either ;) Boni

loved

16 years ago

noted

some folks write the entire comment/ poem in caps and thats what annoys smaller minds thats why i simply suggested to u for safer measures

Bonitaj

16 years ago

Hi Loved!

Smiled when I read 'for safety measures' - my thinking is Let them shoot me! and leave it just the way it is! ;) Much appreciate all your efforts in commenting though! CHeers Boni

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