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shirley harrison
Jul 15, 2010 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

"To Treasure"




“To Treasure”

 

The scent of sweet treasure

locked deep in your heart

that purfume so special

that from which you cannot  part

 

A man,a woman

an object of awe

something so breathtaking

to be cherished and adored

 

If you  regard it as quality

with tender loving care

It will last forever

and will always be there!





— shirley harrison, Jul 15, 2010

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Region, Country: Florence., ITA

Favorite Poets: "Dante"

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shirley harrison

15 years 10 months ago

Dear Sempervirens

Thank you for your lovely comment! much love shirley harrison
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scribbler

15 years 10 months ago

treasure

hey Shirley.Just stopped in for a quick read.I find no need of suggestions or corrections.After you pick self up from fainting via shock lol,please know it was a very pleasant read.....scribbler
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shirley harrison

15 years 10 months ago

Dearest Stan

Thank you so much and i don't faint when you send suggestions! i smile! with much love shirl... shirley harrison
Seren

Seren

15 years 10 months ago

Shirl

I think he meant fainting because he DIDNT give you any suggestions huni lol love JayCee x x x (“To be yourself in a world that is constantly trying to make you something else is the greatest accomplishment.” ~ Ralph Waldo Emerson quote)
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shirley harrison

15 years 10 months ago

Hi Darling

Yes JC L:O:L i faint when he doesnt or when he does! mMMM i love this teasing! I dont faint when any body gives me suggestions! i just smile look down my page, i have been on a hike all weekend and to see you all on my page brings me nothing but pleasure! With love and hugs JC shirl..... shirley harrison
faithmairee

faithmairee

15 years 10 months ago

Very Lovely, Shirley

Such a lovely tender feel to this poem! It is profound! Very nice work, Shirley. Love-Faith ~I never say anything I don't mean nor do I say anything to be mean.~
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shirley harrison

15 years 10 months ago

Dearest Faith

Thank you, my Dear Faith! with much love shirley harrison
lou

lou

15 years 10 months ago

Shirley

Good stuff, simply beautiful Much love Lou Xx
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shirley harrison

15 years 10 months ago

Dear Lou

Thank you my lovely lou! its a mushy one "i think" much love shirl your girl! shirley harrison
professor

professor

15 years 10 months ago

Dear Shirley

Here are some suggestions for you to consider. Mostly they are to improve the flow but also to help extend the imagery etc. Ciao cara, Keith The scent of sweet treasure locked deep in your heart that perfume so special from which you cannot part A man a woman two aspects of one desire something so breathtaking to cherish and admire
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shirley harrison

15 years 10 months ago

Dearest Darling Keith!

i love your little edit and will put all suggestions together and work with them tomorrow! "I Promise"! with much love shirl... shirley harrison
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shirley harrison

15 years 10 months ago

Dear Mona

Thank you! i will be editing tomorrow! Thank you as always for your support! with much love shirl.... shirley harrison
Seren

Seren

15 years 10 months ago

Dear Shirley

Sorry I have been really busy the last few days I had an aunt pass but I finally got to this one .. I read it the other night and thought of some suggestions and got five minutes today to put it together for you this is just how I would have written it .. and if you like any of my changes your very welcome to them love JayCee A trove of sweet treasure locked deep in your heart to have something so special that which you cannot part A man and a woman with an object of awe something so breathtaking to be cherished and adored I regard it with quality with tender loving care and with it lasting forever it will always be there! (“To be yourself in a world that is constantly trying to make you something else is the greatest accomplishment.” ~ Ralph Waldo Emerson quote)
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Marie-I-Be

15 years 10 months ago

Shirley!

This is light, sweet, smooth, airy. I like it as is, actually!
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shirley harrison

15 years 10 months ago

Dearest Marie

wow thank you so much, i'm going to come back to this tomorrow,to see if i can make it even more magical,Thank you for your support its wonderful to see you here! have been away so tomorrow will read every ones i've missed and i cant wait! with much love shirl..... shirley harrison
Nordic cloud

Nordic cloud

15 years 10 months ago

So neatly put dear Shirley

Ann of Norway Not up to as much of a comment that this deserves My love to you keep writing. Ann XXOO "to be cherished and adored" do you need AND?
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shirley harrison

15 years 10 months ago

Dearest Ann

no need for words just your presence is enough for me! PS you inspired this one! with love and many hugs shirl... shirley harrison
xena465

xena465

15 years 10 months ago

Lovely Shirley

It seems there's love in the air with a lot of poets today. Great write. Xena Quote: Science is what you know; philosophy is what you don't know. - Bertrand Russell
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shirley harrison

15 years 10 months ago

Dearest Xena

love is in the air,every where i look around! you know thats a song! you have some treasure "Zak" the most adored pet in the world! P:S your a piece of treasure too! with much love always shirl... shirley harrison
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shirley harrison

15 years 10 months ago

"Wow Thank you again"

Dear Lil Z its truly wonderful to have something or someone to treasure! With much love shirl..... shirley harrison
weirdelf

weirdelf

15 years 10 months ago

oh so very trite

sentimentality to the point of nausea. Niceness is avoiding truth. Cheers, Jess, Praise helps no poet, have the courage and generousity to give critique.