hobo

Jul 15, 2010 ⭐ See this poem's read count — a supporter feature

Mia Mona

I found you from 10,000 miles away
Your eyes piercing my soul
Leaving me wondering

Wondering what’s in your heart
And on your mind
What do you dream
When you dream
From so far away

Are our worlds so different
Or are they the same
Just 10,000 miles away

When my clock strikes 4 pm
You start a brand new day
You are so far in the future
And I abandoned in your past
Destin to chase you forever

Forever in my heart

— hobo, Jul 15, 2010

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Country/Region: USA

Critiques

hobo

16 years ago

for mona

This is for my friend Mona, she is always a day head of me, and I will always be a day behind her, she truly is always in my future lol. I hope everyone likes it *You can never pick anyone up if you are busy putting them down*

lou

16 years ago

Friends

Your everyones friend hobo

mona

16 years ago

Dear Lou, you should respect other people's comments here

As a director in website you should show some respect to other people's comments here ,When you have to do your comment .Just follow the comments sequences . and not by throughing yours in front of the others,and wt ever you want to say just keep it in order. I think this is so rude from you and selfish. Mona

lou

16 years ago

Dear Mona I am Not Rude

Ihave the greatest respect for everyone here, so I think that it is very rude and arrogant of you to take it upon yourself to publicly tell me how you think I should behave. Lou

mona

16 years ago

Dear Lou ,I realy respect you ,

You are my friend ,and I love you With hope to accept my apology but still you have to follow the comments order my dear. Mona

lou

16 years ago

mona

i didn't mean to offend anyone, i just wanted to make a nice comment. lou

magics02

16 years ago

Lou Rude

Never Never she is a great poet here Love at ya gal THE Mona:) xoxo

mona

16 years ago

of course she is a great poet

This is friends arguments my dear. Mona

magics02

16 years ago

Not to worry there

No one is arguing here I just said what I had to say. And if this poem is written to you I apologize for Hobo calls me Mona Mia. We will let him tell us when he gets back and don't you worry your little self over anything. My true name is Mona and my pen name is Magics and they call me all other things to here and I don't have a problem with anyone for that matter. Problems are things one makes for theirselves and I am not one of them. I admire Lou and just wanted to state that.. Toodles.. Good day:) Mona Magics

magics02

16 years ago

Hobo you see what you started

He he haw...miss ya guy and don't forget to get it straightened out when you get back so no one's feelings are hurt. Thank God you have one name and it is Hobo/Randy..lmao love at ya guy and hope you are not working too hard out there. Mia Mona:) xoxoxox

mona

16 years ago

Dear Mona"Magics"

Me and Randy became friends lately ,so he sent to me PM and he asked me if he can use my name in his poem ,also he asked me if he can post it or not .I hope that make sense to you.So please we should leave nice comments here,and if you have more things to say just send PM,not for me for our friend Hobo. Oh,there is some thing else:I know its not legal to publish any work about anybody before taking their permission.hope that make sense to you too. with respect Mona

magics02

16 years ago

Mona

Dont worry as I said it is all good:) I leave nice comments and I have had poems written here for me and no one asked me for permission, that only happens when you send it to publication. Thanks and Hobo wrote a nice poem for you, that is all you can be happy about now. Let this go for hence I do not want to carry this on with you as I have high respect for my Hobo friend. Thank you Mona Magics

mona

16 years ago

THANK YOU MY FRIEND

I LOVE IT. Do I own you one poem back?(wink) Mona

hobo

16 years ago

hummmm

hummmm now that you say it, one back would be nice lol. I am glad you like it my friend :) *You can never pick anyone up if you are busy putting them down*

mona

16 years ago

Of course I like it ,it was so nice of you to write this poem

AND THANKYOUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUU AGAIN MY FRIEND. and about the poem,,,mmmmmmmmmmmmm Ooooooook,,I will try one soon. and you may need to read this one: http://www.neopoet.com/node/39917 your friend MONA

faithmairee

16 years ago

Just Lovely

Five stars for loveliness. Nice one, Hobo! Faith ~I never say anything I don't mean nor do I say anything to be mean.~

lou

16 years ago

Randy

Very nice job my friend Lou xxx

shirley harrison

16 years ago

Hobo The Great!

Just melting! Mia Mona! Just wonderrrrfuuullll!! much love to you and mona! shirley harrison

Candlewitch

16 years ago

Dear Randy

Mona is one of the people whom I really admire, here. I'm so glad to know that you hold her in high regard, too. Always, Cat

mona

16 years ago

Dear Cat

I do so too. THANKS Mona

raj

16 years ago

Dear Hobo..

as is well scripted in your write..the physical distance doesnt distance the loved ones...such is the magic of the ESPs the extra sensory perceptions... warmly...raj (sublime_ocean)...

Professor Purple

16 years ago

Beautiful,

never too many poems of love or friendship between poets! The repetitions are well done. Tricky thing, repetition. I like the lack of punctuation, too. Some poems need punctuation, this one doesn't. I find the opening sentence doen't flow that well, maybe "I know you" instead of "I found you" the ending however is wonderful. Other than that I have two suggestions: "You are so far in [my] future" "Destin[ed] to chase you forever" This is my favourite stanza: "Wondering what’s in your heart And on your mind What do you dream When you dream From so far away" Antoine

Professor Purple

16 years ago

My first double post! Booh!

Antoine

RobeccaJane Le…

16 years ago

HEARTSTOPPINGLY BEAUTIFUL!!!!!!!

I LOVE IT!!!!!! the regard in which you hold our dear mona in is admirable. she is a special woman to all who know her, and she desirves for someone to have written a poem such as this for and about her. this is a very well written poem, and i enjoyed it greatly!!!!! MUAH CHEEKY JSS "please someone help me, its not healthy for me to feel this, Y-O-U, are making this hard, you got me tossing and turnin, late in the night!!!!!;)" Rhianna. PS you know who you are, and trust me this is a good thing;)

mona

16 years ago

and you are special friend too

THANKS JANE Mona

Lonnie

16 years ago

I say Amen to all of the above!

Beautifully written tribute to your friend, and filled with the whimsical sadness of long-distance feelings! Great write, and a great read!

Dalton

16 years ago

I think there is a

I think there is a mispelling in the line last but one, you put: "Destin" i think you meant "Destiny" I liked this pooem very much, as you know I like romantic poems. Wondering whats in your heart And on your mind What do you dream When you dream From so far away my favourite lines Also I like the theme of two lovers (who may not have even met yet, but have some mystical sense that each one exists. In their hearts they know someone is there) across the boundaries of space and time. john

Loreli

16 years ago

Nice

I too have a long distance friend...I can relate. Nice read, thank you for it. Loreli

magics02

16 years ago

Hey Hobo is this Mona Mia:)

What Mona or which Mona is this one for?? Lmao I have a feeling but you must correct it if that is Magic or not? Vain huh? Love at you too and I hope you keep those miles close to your heart for true poets can relate no matter how far away they are. Love at ya and a great poem for Mona whichever it is for.LOL Mona Magics Mia :) xoxoxo

Kailashana

16 years ago

Friendship and love will

Friendship and love will always be the bridge between time and distance. Between words and touch. Between I and Thou. ....wherever you go, there I am.... Light, Anna "There is a kind of mysticism to writing." ~ Irvine Welsh

Seren

16 years ago

Dear Randy

I speak to Mona in Chat from time to time I think shes a sweetheart lovely write for her I can see shes chuffed love and big hugs JayCee x x x

weirdelf

16 years ago

magics, remember mona from libya?

you are self-obsessed Cheers, Jess, Praise helps no poet, have the courage and generousity to give critique.

magics02

16 years ago

No I never really met her

Self obsessed you are so funny elf..first you send me a sweet message and then you comment like this, I got to hand it to you though. You are self obsessed with me:) Just kidding old elf friend. You know I just state the facts Hobo calls me Mona Mia and the title of the poem was Mona Mia so why did I think it was for me? I know it is for Mona somewhere else. Funny how this one got out of hand huh oh I love myself so much it is crazy LMAO if not to love thyself who then to love? Laughing here and thanks for the comment just the same. You know I am obsessed with you also Elf my nail polish is wearing off so I need to apply more. for all who read this I bought a polish it was called ELF and it was punk pink and I shared this with him in our lovely chat session one evening, therefore that is where the polish comment is coming from just in case anyone is curious. Love at ya Elfie!! xoxoxo Mona Magics Last footnote here: out of high respect to the aforementioned parties I shall not make any further comment on Hobo's poem and page out of sheer respect for him:) Thank you

weirdelf

16 years ago

Nice sentiments, hobo, but a bit shallow

You express no insight into who she is or what she is like. And I've got to say, although I've done it myself, it is a trap for young players to write just for people in Neopoet, you can get enmesshed and lose sight of your own vision. We know you are really really nice and want to be everyone's friend but maybe not try so hard. See my tag. Cheers, Jess, Praise helps no poet, have the courage and generosity to give critique.

chumfin

16 years ago

dear poet!

this should not cause any storm in here, this is a great poem for a lady i have so much respect for. hobo you did a great piece for this arabian queen here. thank you for this. it show you r fine heart. regards chumfin

chumfin

16 years ago

mona you are very lucky to

mona you are very lucky to have this in you name, you deserve this. enjoy the moments chumfin

mona

16 years ago

Really I'm

Really Iam lucky with you my dearfriends Thanks all of you for your feedback. Mona

xena465

16 years ago

Very sweet Hobo

Like everyone has stated you're a wonderful guy and your poetry always pleases me, the romantic, fun and the naughty ones ... great stuff my friend. PS. {And I abandoned in your past Destin to chase you forever} I think those two lines would read better as... [I’m abandoned in your past destined to chase you forever.] Xena Quote: Science is what you know; philosophy is what you don't know. - Bertrand Russell

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