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Seren
Seren
Jul 15, 2010 ⭐ See this poem's read count — a supporter feature

Just Remember, Tomorrow

I watch
as whispers
of smoke
curl up into
the stratosphere

then, it was as if
the night seemed to yawn,
a great mouth of darkness,
swallowed the day
and another moment,
was recorded and cataloged
to be digested by the future
but always, held in a voided past

as the smoke
over history thickens
and night and day
turn to meet, face to face
and back to back

I wonder why it is
so many people live
in the past ?,

when all are laying
over the silver hands
of a timepiece, in pockets
made of moments

shining up ahead
is a dreamtime of
'could Be's'
and it awaits,

calling into the fall
of tomorrow

— Seren, Jul 15, 2010

About the Author

Region, Country: Beyond the Black Stump..Australia, AUS

Favorite Poets: Pablo Neruda, P.K.Page, W.H.Auden, to many and various to include them all ...

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faithmairee

faithmairee

16 years ago

Dear JayCee

This one takes my breath away! Such excellent writing! I applaud you! Love-Faith ~I never say anything I don't mean nor do I say anything to be mean.~
Seren

Seren

16 years ago

Dear Faith

Thanks for the comment on this one still needs another couple of edits but I like it enough to work on it thanks again much love JayCee (Quote~~"It is by universal misunderstanding that all agree. For if, by ill luck, people understood each other, they would never agree. "--Charles Baudelaire)
Kailashana

Kailashana

16 years ago

Ahhh, my sweet lady Jayne,

Ahhh, my sweet lady Jayne, what do we remember that hasn't happened yet? Déjà vu? Love, Annamum "There is a kind of mysticism to writing." ~ Irvine Welsh
Seren

Seren

16 years ago

A little bit of Déjà vu, a

A little bit of Déjà vu, a theme I am working on thanks for the visit Ma ... its early morning here and I got family coming at 5am got bacon and eggs ready to go lol love and hugs JayCee x x x (Quote~~"It is by universal misunderstanding that all agree. For if, by ill luck, people understood each other, they would never agree. "--Charles Baudelaire)
loved

loved

16 years ago

ur

an exception a poet one of a kind........ today i went to a bookstore no where could a poem of ur standard could i find perhaps next one would be me /I standing behind
Seren

Seren

16 years ago

Lovedly

finding in the Uniquness of one of a kind that truely is the nicest rhyme thanks for your visit loved and the read love and hugs JayCee x x x (Quote~~"It is by universal misunderstanding that all agree. For if, by ill luck, people understood each other, they would never agree. "--Charles Baudelaire)
SH

shirley harrison

16 years ago

Bloody wonderful!

Dearest JC, fantastic and the 2nd stanza well i am in awe! much love shirl... shirley harrison
Seren

Seren

16 years ago

Dear Shirley

Thanks so much it makes me very happy you liked this one I appreciate the read and the comment hun love and hugs JayCee x (Quote~~"It is by universal misunderstanding that all agree. For if, by ill luck, people understood each other, they would never agree. "--Charles Baudelaire)
Nordic cloud

Nordic cloud

16 years ago

I second Shirley here dearest Jayne

Ann of Norway Yow you get just better and better, eclipsing both the night and day in our minds, grabbing the silver moments of time and showing us the sheer beauty of living in the NOW! I cannot dissect it it has a curling beauty as its tendrils of smoke permeate my being as the dusk falls like jewelled prisms ever changing the shots of colour, way into space and way into the kernel of myself, refracted lights of rainbows forever chanting the same most heavenly song. Love it Jayne dear you, Ann.
Seren

Seren

16 years ago

Dearest Ann

You know when you like my poetry ? it makes me want to whirl round like a spinning top :) makes me very happy thanks darlin you got mail lol love and biggest hugs JayCee x x x (Quote~~"It is by universal misunderstanding that all agree. For if, by ill luck, people understood each other, they would never agree. "--Charles Baudelaire)
Seren

Seren

16 years ago

Dear Lonnie

coming from a master such as yourself that is a great compliment thank you hun ,... prolific ? me and time are in a race im winning so far lol ;) love and hugs JayCee x x x (Quote~~"It is by universal misunderstanding that all agree. For if, by ill luck, people understood each other, they would never agree. "--Charles Baudelaire)
S

scribbler

16 years ago

tomorrow

I try to live in this,no this,this....damn!Soon as I realize the moment is here,its moved from now to past.Hope I got poem's meaning right....scribbler
Seren

Seren

16 years ago

Dear Stan

Your close the meaning is that to live you have to do it now you cannot live in a void that doesnt exisit anymore(past) I used to quite a bit, but these days I look forward looking back should be done with a peaceful heart not anger or sadness (though we all do it) were poets and cant not look back ... just the message live for the now and not bother about the mistakes I've made learn from them and move on god why am I telling you this ? lol I am sure you could tell me more than I could ever tell you lol big hugs and much love JayCee x x x (Quote~~"It is by universal misunderstanding that all agree. For if, by ill luck, people understood each other, they would never agree. "--Charles Baudelaire)
S

scribbler

16 years ago

why telling

me this? because friends are allowed to talk outside of work,thats why lol
Seren

Seren

16 years ago

Stan we need a smiley face

Stan we need a smiley face for under your picture you certainly know how to cheer a person up ... thats a damn good point you make lol but ive been known to ramble a little lol smile love and big hugs JayCee x x x (Quote~~"It is by universal misunderstanding that all agree. For if, by ill luck, people understood each other, they would never agree. "--Charles Baudelaire)
loved

loved

16 years ago

the more i do

think of tomorrow the more i feel like clinging on to today for when tomorrow comes twill be another today.............. today...................... today
Seren

Seren

16 years ago

But Tomorrow is yet another day ;)

Love JayCee (Quote~~"It is by universal misunderstanding that all agree. For if, by ill luck, people understood each other, they would never agree. "--Charles Baudelaire)
Seren

Seren

16 years ago

tis always another day or

tis always another day or another moment in a milli second Smile have a great weekend loved love JayCee (“To be yourself in a world that is constantly trying to make you something else is the greatest accomplishment.” ~ Ralph Waldo Emerson quote)
Bonitaj

Bonitaj

16 years ago

Just splendid!

to be digested by the future but always, held in a voided past" Have to be two of my favourite lines! Another good write Jay-Cee! Regards Boni
Seren

Seren

16 years ago

Dear Bonni

huni I am really happy you liked those lines ... I finished this the other morning after we finished chatting love and big hugs JayCee (Quote~~"It is by universal misunderstanding that all agree. For if, by ill luck, people understood each other, they would never agree. "--Charles Baudelaire)
Candlewitch

Candlewitch

16 years ago

Dearest Jayne

Sometimes a person's past can be compellingly haunting. I know... But usually when I find myself drifting to the old days and old ways, I give myself a little kick in the arse and say to myself, "You're doing it again!" Brilliant poem with marvelous imagery and metaphors. My favorite lines: as the smoke over history thickens and night and day turn to meet, face to face and back to back Love, Cat
Seren

Seren

16 years ago

Dearest Cat

Dont I know that feeling sigh thanks for the lovely comment hun its really appreciated ... couldnt sleep so I got up to finish a poem maybe love and big hugs JayCee x x x (Quote~~"It is by universal misunderstanding that all agree. For if, by ill luck, people understood each other, they would never agree. "--Charles Baudelaire)
Seren

Seren

16 years ago

Dearest Shan

I am so happy you like this one and I am honoured at your wonderful compliment my friend love and big hugs JayCee x x x (“To be yourself in a world that is constantly trying to make you something else is the greatest accomplishment.” ~ Ralph Waldo Emerson quote)
M

magics02

16 years ago

Inspiring thoughts

I like the change up in your poetry Seren as lately I am in tune over your pieces of fine art. This part reads well to me shining up ahead is a dreamtime of ‘could Be’s’ and it awaits, How true it is!!! Awaiting... Love at ya Aussie gal Mona
Seren

Seren

16 years ago

Dearest Mona

There has been a change in my poetry lately lol I am writing with both my muses whispering in my ear lol I am finding it hard to keep up, everytime I turn around they are whispering more poetry in my ear lol giggle hope you and Joey have a great weekend lovely love and big hugs JayCee x x x x (“To be yourself in a world that is constantly trying to make you something else is the greatest accomplishment.” ~ Ralph Waldo Emerson quote)

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