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Jul 15, 2010
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Visible Problems, Hidden Solutions
Drop your problems beneath the seaThe sharks will never devourBury them under the sycamore treeLike zombies they’re back and more sour This wounded ocean is bleeding oilYour anchor of dreams is destroyedAttempts on fixing this, left in turmoilThey’re lost in his lies, men deployed He’s painted pictures of life in his mindWith promises Jordan can’t jumpOh ideal portrait, will we ever find?Can we ever get over this hump? There’s fluctuation still happening nowIf I’m right, that was something he’d fixIt’s a rollercoaster of stock and the dowFinancially, we’re hurling sticks
— Lil Z, Jul 15, 2010
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greeneyes
16 years ago
Damn Boy!
Lil Z
16 years ago
Thanks very much Green Eyes!
xena465
16 years ago
Wow Lil
Lil Z
16 years ago
Thank you Xena!
scribbler
16 years ago
problems
Lil Z
16 years ago
Thank you very much Scribbler!
Candlewitch
16 years ago
Hello Lil z
Lil Z
16 years ago
Thank you Cat!
magics02
16 years ago
Lil Z
Lil Z
16 years ago
Thanks Mona!
magics02
16 years ago
Okay let and give me some ideas
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