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LZ

Visible Problems, Hidden Solutions

Drop your problems beneath the seaThe sharks will never devourBury them under the sycamore treeLike zombies they’re back and more sour This wounded ocean is bleeding oilYour anchor of dreams is destroyedAttempts on fixing this, left in turmoilThey’re lost in his lies, men deployed He’s painted pictures of life in his mindWith promises Jordan can’t jumpOh ideal portrait, will we ever find?Can we ever get over this hump? There’s fluctuation still happening nowIf I’m right, that was something he’d fixIt’s a rollercoaster of stock and the dowFinancially, we’re hurling sticks
— Lil Z, Jul 15, 2010

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greeneyes

greeneyes

15 years 10 months ago

Damn Boy!

Your work is so amazing! I am impressed with it. This poem is unbelievable.
xena465

xena465

15 years 10 months ago

Wow Lil

This is so great I love the imaginary. "Drop your problems beneath the sea The sharks will never devour" ... Wonderful. Xena Quote: Science is what you know; philosophy is what you don't know. - Bertrand Russell
LZ

Lil Z

15 years 10 months ago

Thank you Xena!

Thank you so much for your comments and support, I'm glad you liked it!
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scribbler

15 years 10 months ago

problems

very pertinent write.I believe he's let us all down.Need to fix the oil-foiled near rhyme.Might try a few changes.line 14:something he said he'd fix,line 16:will we get off before we're sick.Just a few alternatives to consider.PS good to have you back writing.......scribbler
Candlewitch

Candlewitch

15 years 10 months ago

Hello Lil z

I am bowled over by your poem. You Have a good understanding of the problems. Always, Cat
LZ

Lil Z

15 years 10 months ago

Thank you Cat!

Thank you so much for your supportive comment, and I'm glad you liked it!
M

magics02

15 years 10 months ago

Lil Z

This one you should send into a literary magazine. You say you are only 13?? Wow I am impressed with your works and wanted to let you know that. I will be waiting for your spoken word soon as you challenge yourself to go for it. Much gratitude for a very well penned poem Hugs and wishes..along with some Lil Z kisses.. Mona Magics xoxoxo
LZ

Lil Z

15 years 10 months ago

Thanks Mona!

Thank you for your support! By the way, I would love it if you wrote me a rap song! :D