In Time

In time, I'll lose
All of my bearings -
The pens, papers, books
And poetry linings
Etched between memories.

Before these things are gone
I myself will be
The sentiment
Of my upbringing:
The downfall of old age
And the ripening
Of dying years.

Thin strands of hair will fall
One after the other
Till the shadow of an old man
Occupies the mane
He once had.

Only then will I realize
The aggravation,
My lifeline disturbed
Not by premonition,
But a song.

— Dennis Go, Jul 14, 2010

About This Poem

About the Author

Region, Country: Manila, PHL

Favorite Poets: R.S. Thomas, William Blake, Emily Dickinson, Dylan Thomas

Critiques

faithmairee

15 years 11 months ago

Excellent Work

Wow! Dennis, this poem is so well written. My nomination is for good diction, great flow and powerful delivery. Excellent work, friend! Love-Faith ~I never say anything I don't mean nor do I say anything to be mean.~

ziggy

15 years 11 months ago

hi

hi the way you used all caps really caught my eye what was your reason fo doing so as this might be considered shouting its a great read i really like and enjoyed, i have to ask where you say " till the shadow of an old man Occupies the main he once have" instead of the word have i was thinking "had" as , he once, would indicate past tense, i only say as i do like this indeed ,,,,,,,,,zigs

shirley harrison

15 years 10 months ago

Dearest Dennis

so i have been here trying to find a favourite part and i can't because its all beautiful! you have a true spirit and i think you are amazing! I love the ending its wonderful! with much love shirl....... shirley harrison

magics02

15 years 10 months ago

Dennis You Go

I really liked this one you have here. Short and to the point. really nice here. Keep up the good works Love,Mona xoxox

Mari Shine

15 years 10 months ago

Another superb penning in

Another superb penning in this wonderfully expressed write Dennis. You are far too young to be contemplating getting old yet! You're only a 'little boy' with many years ahead before you get to the old age stage! Wonderful phrasing and imagery in the write Dennis - amazed at what a song can induce! Beautiful work Dennis. Thank you so very much for sharing!

xena465

15 years 10 months ago

Dear Dennis

Your writings will never die no matter how old you get. Just keep them coming and preseve them on paper for your family to keep forever. Xena Quote: Science is what you know; philosophy is what you don't know. - Bertrand Russell

Seren

15 years 10 months ago

Dear Dennis

Those last lines are sublime The lifeline disturbed Not by premonition, But a song. only have one suggestion and its just that a suggestion if you dont like ignore me ... My lifelines disturbed not by premonition but a song damn they are brilliant lines though bravo love JayCee (Quote~~"It is by universal misunderstanding that all agree. For if, by ill luck, people understood each other, they would never agree. "--Charles Baudelaire)

Seren

15 years 10 months ago

Yep now it reads perfect …

Yep now it reads perfect ... sigh I love this one love JayCee (Quote~~"It is by universal misunderstanding that all agree. For if, by ill luck, people understood each other, they would never agree. "--Charles Baudelaire)