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My Life's Torch

My Life's Torch

The torch of my life

Has shown the path

Through the dark unknown

Tunnels of time

As I swiftly move across

The passage of eternity

Towards unknown horizons

And

Deserts of life

In search of oases

And

Avoiding mirages,

I seed another sort of evolution

This carries my imprint

As an engineered blue print,

In the annals of time

Towards the far never ending

Remote horizon,

This move beyond

My impressionable imagination,

As I seed the foundation

Of a newer generation

Ere I leave

And my soul cools to be

An animation of a once lived one

For by then I shall have ceased to exist

Leaving upon the shoulders

Of a changed,

Time

Environment

And

Circumstance,

As an indelible mark

Of what they all,

As well as you all,

You all,

You all

Will call me

As edited by Shirley Harrison

— loved, Jul 14, 2010

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Critiques

shirley harrison

15 years 11 months ago

This is another very special write Loved

Again i think it needs a small amount of help from a pro, as i am convinced it will be another like "Your Loving Eyes" As i do not feel sure to help i will be back to see if you have had other feed back from those who can help better than i with Great love shirley harrison

xena465

15 years 11 months ago

This is so good

I love where you take us with this beautiful write Loved. There's just the one thing that can be a little confusing. At the beginning, your title clashes with the poem. Perhaps delete it or put some extra spacing between the title and the poem. ...Just a suggestion. Xena Quote: Science is what you know; philosophy is what you don't know. - Bertrand Russell

shirley harrison

15 years 11 months ago

i will try for you loved!

Look at this........................... The Torch of my life has shown the path, through the dark unknown tunnels of time As i swiftly move across the passage of etenity towars the unknown horizon and desrts of life in search of my oasis and avoiding mirages i seed another sort of evolution This will carry my inprint as an engineered blue print in the annals of time Towards the far and never ending remote horizon and more beyond my impressionable amagination as i seed the foundations of a new generation ere i leave and my soul cools to be an animation of a once lived shadow for then i shall have ceased to exsist leaving upon the shoulders of a changed time Environment and circamstance as an indelible mark of what they all as well as you all you all you all will call me!

loved

15 years 11 months ago

MA'AM THANKS

For ur kind edit i have corrected the spellings and grammar computerly and planted it with gratitude grace from you

Seren

15 years 11 months ago

Dearest Loved

Lovely write ... great use of imagery love and hugs JayCee (Quote~~"It is by universal misunderstanding that all agree. For if, by ill luck, people understood each other, they would never agree. "--Charles Baudelaire)

loved

15 years 11 months ago

thanks a lot kindly reread

as edited by Shirley Harrison ma'am

shirley harrison

15 years 11 months ago

Loved

I'm speechless! You know i love your work for me its all got the scent of raging fire thats for sure and so totaly unique! wonderful my dear friend! shirley harrison

loved

15 years 11 months ago

ur not

speechless!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! You are the silent forerunner for the one who is about to kindle a fire of poetic EVOLUTION an explosion.............. in the world so dull without love and animation as u r my wellwisher!!!!!! I bow down to thee.............. where is ur knee where is your knee where is ur knee???????????????????

faithmairee

15 years 11 months ago

Very Lovely, Loved

Love your imagery and the sheer beauty of this write...five stars for beauty, Loved! Much love-Faith ~I never say anything I don't mean nor do I say anything to be mean.~

loved

15 years 10 months ago

gratefulness lies

in the abode of those who evaluate with love and wisdom and appreciate with gladness so u r one such admirer worth the admiration thanks

Lil Z

15 years 10 months ago

A brilliant write!

Brilliant loved, I don't mean to sound corny, but I LOVE your style!

loved

15 years 10 months ago

corny does it

brilliance and dalliance are words one would love to hear and if u like to read me for u many a cheers some day with ur kindness i may get many a claps and a standing ovation too perhaps.............. perhaps.............. perhaps