faithmairee

Jul 14, 2010 ⭐ See this poem's read count — a supporter feature

in the woodlands

there you are deep in the woodlands
dancing where the fireflies abound
no one would even know you’re there
if it weren’t for the baying of the hounds

you sprinkle all your magic dust
where it is needed most
the garden is your favorite spot
behind our house on the east coast

what you do and where you go
it matters not to me at all
i only know it thrills me when
i watch the fairies spring time ball

— faithmairee, Jul 14, 2010

About the Author

Region, Country: Florida, United States, USA

Favorite Poets: Lawrence Ferlinghetti, Edna St. Vincent Millay, Lucille Clifton and Elizabeth Bishop

Critiques

greeneyes

16 years ago

Wow

I love this poem! I love fairies and everything to do with them.

faithmairee

16 years ago

Thank You So Much

Thank you! I'm thrilled you like it. Love-Faith ~I never say anything I don't mean nor do I say anything to be mean.~

loved

16 years ago

U INSPIRE ALL

Let me uuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuu

faithmairee

16 years ago

Thank You

I'm so honored by your wonderful remark. Thanks, Loved! Love ya-Faith ~I never say anything I don't mean nor do I say anything to be mean.~

shirley harrison

16 years ago

Wonderful

Dear Faith, what a lovely fantasy poem i can see many pictures in my mind,i am a fan of fireflies they are stunning! Fairies instead of faeries? with much love shirl.... shirley harrison

faithmairee

16 years ago

Thank You

Thanks, Shirley. I fixed it. I'm a fan of fireflies myself! I'm so glad you enjoyed my little poem. Love-Faith ~I never say anything I don't mean nor do I say anything to be mean.~

hobo

16 years ago

This is

This is very good work again my friend, you are talented :) *You can never pick anyone up if you are busy putting them down*

faithmairee

16 years ago

You're So Kind

Thank you so much, Hobo! Love-Faith ~I never say anything I don't mean nor do I say anything to be mean.~

xena465

16 years ago

Dear Faith

This is so great I could picture all of the lovely images as I read each word. Super. Xena Quote: Science is what you know; philosophy is what you don't know. - Bertrand Russell

faithmairee

16 years ago

Dear Xena

Thank you so much as I was aiming for vivid imagery in this one. Love-Faith ~I never say anything I don't mean nor do I say anything to be mean.~

Mari Shine

16 years ago

An absolutely enchanting

An absolutely enchanting poem in this magical write, Faithmairee. Didn't want it to end, it is so beautiful. Thank you so very much for so kindly sharing........

faithmairee

16 years ago

And I Thank You

From the bottom of my heart, Dear Mari, thanks, you made my day! Love-Faith ~I never say anything I don't mean nor do I say anything to be mean.~

scribbler

16 years ago

always enjoy woodland themes,and this is no exception.With all the rhyme I couldn't help but read as western classic.Hence a few suggestions. line 4 try:weren't for the baying...... line8 either delete"the" or change"eastern" to east line 11 delete "so" any time you tire of my suggestions just let me know as no offense will be taken.....scribbler

faithmairee

16 years ago

Goodness No

I never tire of your suggestions. I appreciate all of your feedback. I am considering all the suggestions you have made here. Just one question regarding weren't vs. wasn't. Since I wrote the poem in present tense wouldn't wasn't be grammatically correct? Please correct me if I am wrong. I've been researching this on-line with no success. Please don't hesitate to make helpful suggestions on my writing. I take all of your feedback in the spirit it was intended. Your friend-Faith ~I never say anything I don't mean nor do I say anything to be mean.~

scribbler

16 years ago

weren't

In this application weren't is contraction for were it not which I don't think would move tense to past.Check with someone else to be sure as I'd hate to cause a mistake.Hmmmm....try were't

faithmairee

16 years ago

Ok, Let Me Know

Stan-I have changed some things including making it western classic so please let me know if the changes are solid. Thanks for your kind attention to my poem. Love-Faith ~I never say anything I don't mean nor do I say anything to be mean.~

xena465

16 years ago

Hiya Faith

I agree with Stan with `weren’t` because you’re talking about the present, {wasn’t} is in the past, also with `east` it reads better, and with `so` you don’t really need this word. I hope this helps. Just one other wee thing ... I don’t know if you can spell it both ways but in this line... the garden is your {favorite] spot ………………..[favourite] PS. I do this a lot in my writes, get the past and present confused and it’s only when someone sees it that I notice it. Xena Quote: Science is what you know; philosophy is what you don't know. - Bertrand Russell

faithmairee

16 years ago

Thanks, Xena

Thanks, Xena. I made some changes but favorite is not wrong. So I have left word as is since it can be spelled both ways I think. Thank you for your kind attention to my little poem. Love-Faith ~I never say anything I don't mean nor do I say anything to be mean.~

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