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Melisenda (Part 2)

She is the empress of the four gales
a witch among her people
she has a gem that turns stone to water
she draws wisdom from a snake
that twists through time
she raises a finger
and a city is a desert
winks and it is a bustling metropolis
she has killed for love
stomach swelled for love
she seeks her beloved in the night
and is not evil...
— Dalton, Jul 13, 2010

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Country/Region: The Celestial River

Favorite Poets: Shane MacGowan, Dylan Thomas, Qays ibn Al-Mulawwah, Wallada bint al-Mustakfi, Rumi, Khalil Gibran, Yona Wallach, Arthur Rimbaud, Paul Eluard, Brendan Behan, James Clarence Mangan, William Blake, Tom Waits, Charles Bukowski, Forough Farrokhzad, Thomas Chatterton

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Kailashana

Kailashana

15 years 11 months ago

Melisenda… another name

Melisenda... another name for Kali? lol. I am very much liking this poem, John. The last two lines are a killer. ~A spelling: empress & four... "There is a kind of mysticism to writing." ~ Irvine Welsh
Ravenshakti

Ravenshakti

15 years 11 months ago

Reminds me of Melusine de Lusignan...

This is exquisite John... reminds me of my favourite myth, that of Melusine... Mélusine (The Honeyed One) was cursed to become a serpent from the waist down every Saturday. This would be her fate until she met a man who would marry her under the condition that he never saw her on a Saturday while she took her bath. Melusine (Melusina, Mellusine and Merlusine) is a Breton heroine known from the folk tale of the 'Fairy Melusine' where she is typically represented as a woman who is half fish or half serpent. She marries a mortal, Raimond De Lusignan, Count of Poitou, but makes him promise that he will never try to find out what she does each Saturday. Promising him that if he breached his oath he would forever be deprived of she whom he loved so much. From her great wealth she created for him the castle of Lusignan right next to the Fountain of Thirst, where they had first seen each other. Of course, Raimond's cuiriosity gets the better of him and he seeks out Melusine on a Sautrday and as a result she is lost to him. I love Melusine... I even have a cat name Melusine... Thank you, for the sweet memory... Raven "Who can tell the dancer from the dance?" -William Butler Yeats
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Dalton

15 years 11 months ago

Thankyou indeed Raven, the

Thankyou indeed Raven, the name Melisenda comes from an old Spanish poem, I have from a book of spanish poems translated into english. An Anonymous poem called "Romance of the Fair Melisenda" in which a Moorish princess (who also turns out to be a witch) wakes in the night desperate to be with her lover. I have embellished the story greatly, I loved the name and her story. The second part here I wrote a few days ago, but the first Part also found on my profile page, is one of my oldest poems. If you like I could post you the poem that inspired this idea, I think they are different enough for me not to worry. Thankyou also very much for your story of Melusine de Lusignan. Why do people in folktales never do as they are told? I suppose its human nature. thanks for the read john