ziggy

Jul 13, 2010 ⭐ See this poem's read count — a supporter feature

NIGHT VISIONS

A dreamers tale
that lay in wait woken
from it`s happy state,
unyielding to reality
this subconscious mortality.

Eyes wide open
and still i`m hoping
obstacles will tumble
crumble at my feet
having lived and chosen.

Slept within the pattern
that I have woven have
tossed and turned body
shaking not asleep or waking
pupils dilating reality flipped.

I was taken by my mind
to seek the truth of things
this conscious face can`t find.

— ziggy, Jul 13, 2010

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xena465

16 years ago

Dear Zigs

I’m an expert on night visions. When you’re asleep but not, awake but not, it’s so dam frustrating. Then when you really are awake and faced with the unnatural sleep that haunts you, it can play with your mind and leave you tired and wanting a good kip. Brilliant Ziggy x PS. I hope this isn’t too far off the mark of the poem ... just my interpretation. Xena Quote: Science is what you know; philosophy is what you don't know. - Bertrand Russell

ziggy

16 years ago

hi there

hi lol your interpretation is on the money this was one that took a few goes to get finished well i hope it is i guess i`ll soon find out lmao ,,thank you so much for the comment keep well ,,,,,,,zigs,,,,,,x

ziggy

16 years ago

oops

oops i did it again gave my self stars lmao sorry

xena465

16 years ago

Tee hee

I've done that a few times too. Usually when I'm about to comment on a poem I put in the stars first in case I forget, so sometimes you forget you’re replying and not commenting. Xena Quote: Science is what you know; philosophy is what you don't know. - Bertrand Russell

magics02

16 years ago

Hey Zigs

Night Visions hmmmm nice like bats maybe?? I like it and I need to come back to check it our again. Miss ya guy and Hope all is fine by you. Love Mona xoxox

ziggy

16 years ago

hi

hi mmmm like bats not sure lol, xena was right with her views on this one, I have not been away mona our paths have not crossed much of late thats all , cheers for the interest i`ll go to your pm now thank you,,,,,,,,,,zigs

magics02

16 years ago

Hey Zigs

Night Visions hmmmm nice like bats maybe?? I like it and I need to come back to check it out again. Miss ya guy and Hope all is fine by you. Love Mona xoxox

Seren

16 years ago

Dear Ziggy

what can I say but you know I love the night ... bravo my friend love and big hugs JayCee (Quote~~"It is by universal misunderstanding that all agree. For if, by ill luck, people understood each other, they would never agree. "--Charles Baudelaire)

ziggy

16 years ago

hi there jayne

hi jayne, this is as you would know about how some folk go though what are know as night visions finding them selfs in a state where there dreams seem so real and sometimes so vivid they can`t tell the difference between them and reality and they can for some be very scarey and can strike day or night, i never had them but i find the subject very interesting all the same, i hope all is well down under ,,,,,,,zigs

Candlewitch

16 years ago

Dear Ziggy

I love your poem, but I hate it when I dream I am awake and every thing gets all mixed up. You've got some great lines here, but my favorites are: I was taken by my mind to seek the truth of things this conscious face can`t find. Always, Cat

ziggy

16 years ago

hi cat

hi cat lol i just sent you a pm thank you for telling me your fav lines i had a couple more lines after that but they got chopped in an edit as i do, i used the word face as i had already used mind and was trying to avoid using that word twice and it also explains that line you picked out a little better but you know me i dont always like it to be to clear a little bit of thought behind the lines for the reader can be the way i go cheers for the comment,,,,,,zigs

shirley harrison

16 years ago

Hello Ziggy

my mind seems to be stronger at night and i can have all sorts of idea's and sometimes inventions that just wont let me rest then in the morning i think "what" Night vision very nicely done! love.... shirley harrison

ziggy

16 years ago

well hello

hi yes dreams are something that i tend to do not long before waking or that could be that they are just the one`s I remember lol , thank you so much for stopping by ,,,,,,,zigs x

Victorclaude

16 years ago

“I was taken by my mind to

"I was taken by my mind to seek the truth of things this conscious face can`t find." This is so appropriate for dreamers, asleep or awake. The mind often seems to work on its own, as it never stops for us to catch up, almost like there are two of us in one corporeal shell. Indeed, if we catch even a tithe of what all those firing neurons can come up with in what we call consciousness we are very fortunate. Victor

ziggy

16 years ago

hello there

hi there thanks so much for the comment " like two of us in one corporeal shell " that says alot does it not interesting subject this i find i am glad you picked out those lines i did a wee bit of reading to come up with those lines you picked out and that is my version of what i thought, i was reading your info on your page you certainly have lived an interesting life so far i had a uncle in vietnam he also came though it alive he never talks about it and i would never ask him to, i also have a great interest in photography but i am old school with an SLR not digital yet lol, but i don`t earn from it these days , chat soon victor ,,,,,,,,,,,,zigs

Victorclaude

16 years ago

Ziggy,I have two Nikon F-3s,

Ziggy, I have two Nikon F-3s, and a new Nikon D-3000. Digital is OK, but I miss the darkroom and its smells. Photoshop may be alright for some, but there is not the magic in it that comes from the darkroom -- dodging and burning with real light, not what a computer calls light. Yes, my life has been one adventure after another for certain. Some good, some not so. What a trip, though. Victor

loved

16 years ago

LOVELY WORDS THAT CAN'T BE MISTAKEN

/////I was taken by my mind to seek the truth of things this conscious face can`t find.//// JUST WONDERFULwords which can be endeared lovely says lovedly lovelylovedlyhoneyvisionary MY NEW BLOG NAME

ziggy

16 years ago

hi

hi there you also picked out my fav lines cheers for the comment keep well and happy ,,,,,,,,,zigs x

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