The Aspirant

I have a couple of thoughts for this one ... but its late and my brains tired I copied it and will do a tiny edit in the morning and show you what I think brilliant poem though :) post it note up lol so I dont forget love and hugs JayCee x x x x (Quote~~"It is by universal misunderstanding that all agree. For if, by ill luck, people understood each other, they would never agree. "--Charles Baudelaire)

Dear Cat-I like it. It reads like lyrics but without a chorus. You have some good lines. I just don't understand the "baby driver" part. Overall, I like it. Love-Faith ~I never say anything I don't mean nor do I say anything to be mean.~

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Dearest Cat and Eddy, mess with your brain Fry you up sweet just 2 lines that i love , but i loved it all Cat and eddy You Rock! much love shirl.... shirley harrison

I broke this up a little into verses for you ... if you want I would love to play with it some more ... I swapped one line around see what you think it stands out love and big hugs JayCee x x playing to an audience of mirrors she practices her lines born to the performing arts she was destined to be self-made woman so immature… a baby Diva, she’s a baby driver this baby’s gone over right over my head and my dead body straight to you you’re the next Mister… Blue Plate Special she’ll serve you up neat mess up your perfect sheets bet you never thought you’d be just another entree on her feminine menu little diva, she’s a baby driver gonna pull that mule train mess with your brain fry you up sweet between black satin sheets take you all the way down leave you all alone, so very far from your home she gonna make you, then she’ll break you little diva, she’s a baby driver and she’ll drive right over you you’ll be just another red stain on the highway when baby driver’s through with you. (Quote~~"It is by universal misunderstanding that all agree. For if, by ill luck, people understood each other, they would never agree. "--Charles Baudelaire)

eddy strikes again! after reading a few lines i was thinking mmmm sounds like a potential song then i was glad to see you indicated that at the end, i`m sure hood would love it and offer a chorus and my fav lines are " playing to an audience of mirrors she practices her lines " a great opening couple of lines " she`ll serve you neat mess up your perfect sheets" some great metaphors here very clever great job ,,,,,,,,,,,zigs

"Baby driver" what a nice way to express someone young and inexperienced. A fabulous write Cat. Xena Quote: Science is what you know; philosophy is what you don't know. - Bertrand Russell

how this could be made into lyrics, and lo and behold! You said that it just might be made into song! I like what I thought was a warning from the male perspective. Coming from a woman, that is always interesting. I love when a person tries on the other gender. Great job! ~ Gee

Hello gal and I just had a read, not quite awake but the brains on the highway woke me up. lol I like this one but I got stumped up on this line a bit just another entree on her feminine menu I don't know this line threw me off. The blue plate special I liked that one!! Maybe I will revisit this one with a different line. I still havent drank all my coffee yet.LOL Love at you Golden Lady Mona xoxox

I had to come back while I had five minutes and see what you did with this one ... brava darlin nominated and it is a great poem I love it thats why I was so eager to help lol love and big hugs JayCee x x x (“To be yourself in a world that is constantly trying to make you something else is the greatest accomplishment.” ~ Ralph Waldo Emerson quote)