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Shooting with Stars of Awe

I have always known,
I was a slender
pale vein beating
in the throat of the earth
feathering at its nape,
and that I was rarely
noticed

but the hand of a god
was rested on the pulse
of me and a speck of dust
has been anointed by his hand

the Snow globe of winter
cracked open
as incandescent fingers
of light dropped through,
I knew then
this was a day
unlike any another

I was in
the thrall of madness
the last time
I felt the eyes of a god
rest on me

but now I've been touched

Is this the madness
of divinity
or a reality in awe?

I don't care, anymore,
this speck of dust
has now been mapped
by the hand of a god

and in his heart
there is a place
ever waiting my return

this simple speck
has found a home in heaven

kissed by the stars
 

— Seren, Jul 13, 2010

About This Poem

About the Author

Region, Country: Beyond the Black Stump..Australia, AUS

Favorite Poets: Pablo Neruda, P.K.Page, W.H.Auden, to many and various to include them all ...

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Candlewitch

Candlewitch

15 years 11 months ago

Dearest Jayne

The simplicity of this write is magical. I love that you see your self as such a tiny thing in the scheme of it all. But every tiny mote is significant to the order of the multiverse. Favorite line: the Snow globe of winter cracked open as incandescent fingers of light dropped through, I knew then this was a day unlike any another Love, Cat
Seren

Seren

15 years 11 months ago

theres a story behind this

theres a story behind this poem I might tell in poety one day thanks for the lovely comment I am so glad you liked this one it was pure inspiration only wrote it tonight lol its a first for a while posting on the day I write it but I loved it still got a little work to do but its a keeper love and big hugs JayCee x x x (Quote~~"It is by universal misunderstanding that all agree. For if, by ill luck, people understood each other, they would never agree. "--Charles Baudelaire)
C

CyberSpace

15 years 11 months ago

lol you are clever fucking

lol you are clever fucking love this one love hubby xoxoxoxoxoxoxoxoxox
Seren

Seren

15 years 11 months ago

Thanks baby glad you like it

Thanks baby glad you like it love and hugs JayCee x x x (Quote~~"It is by universal misunderstanding that all agree. For if, by ill luck, people understood each other, they would never agree. "--Charles Baudelaire)
SH

shirley harrison

15 years 11 months ago

Dear JC

I am a great fan of your work,as you know! Amazing the first stanza as you are describing your self is my favourite as we are all just a drop in the ocean! So brilliant much love shirl.............. shirley harrison
Seren

Seren

15 years 11 months ago

Dear Shirley

So glad you liked this one I only wrote it tonight lol got a little more tweaking to do but I even I liked this one something I dont usually love and hugs JayCee (Quote~~"It is by universal misunderstanding that all agree. For if, by ill luck, people understood each other, they would never agree. "--Charles Baudelaire)
faithmairee

faithmairee

15 years 11 months ago

Great Poem

Love your diction and the ending was fabulous! Great poem!!! Love-Faith ~I never say anything I don't mean nor do I say anything to be mean.~
Seren

Seren

15 years 11 months ago

Dear Faith

Thank you for your very kind comment I really appreciate it ... I will be round later having a look at what you have been writing :) love and hugs JayCee (Quote~~"It is by universal misunderstanding that all agree. For if, by ill luck, people understood each other, they would never agree. "--Charles Baudelaire)
xena465

xena465

15 years 11 months ago

LIke Cat

I love the mention of the snow globe cracking open to release all the little fragments. I haven’t seen one of them for years, but I do remember how much I loved them. Wonderful JayCee. Xena Quote: Science is what you know; philosophy is what you don't know. - Bertrand Russell
Seren

Seren

15 years 11 months ago

Dear Xena

I used to collect snow globes when i was a kid thanks for the lovely comment I appreciate it hun love and big hugs JayCee (Quote~~"It is by universal misunderstanding that all agree. For if, by ill luck, people understood each other, they would never agree. "--Charles Baudelaire)
hobo

hobo

15 years 11 months ago

once I was lost

This is beautiful, once I was lost and now I am found :) *You can never pick anyone up if you are busy putting them down*
Seren

Seren

15 years 11 months ago

Dearest Randy

never lost lol just noticed love and big hugs JayCee thanks so much for the comment and the read I loved your newest one as well (Quote~~"It is by universal misunderstanding that all agree. For if, by ill luck, people understood each other, they would never agree. "--Charles Baudelaire)
Electric Blue

Electric Blue

15 years 11 months ago

Shooting Stars

Jay-Cee I feel this was you saying that you accept what is to be as we have not power over it and by relating it to the Snow Ball cracking. Showing us that we are all but a speck of dust in the universe of things. Beautiful as always Electric Blue
Seren

Seren

15 years 11 months ago

Dearest Magz

I love your view of this one huni but this was a real happening that I have turned into poetry ... the meaning is that even a speck of dirt no matter how insignifigant is noticed at least once and this speck of dirt :) was noticed for about a milli second lol ... but it felt nice to be seen if you see what I mean much love and hugs JayCee (Quote~~"It is by universal misunderstanding that all agree. For if, by ill luck, people understood each other, they would never agree. "--Charles Baudelaire)
S

scribbler

15 years 11 months ago

awe

A very good write on perceived place in universe.Minor suggestion: unless referring to a person , I'd drop the"a"s preceeding god......Stan
Seren

Seren

15 years 11 months ago

Dearest Stan

It is a person but thanks so much for the comment just something nice happened for a change and this one was my way of putting that into words love and big hugs JayCee x x x (Quote~~"It is by universal misunderstanding that all agree. For if, by ill luck, people understood each other, they would never agree. "--Charles Baudelaire)
lou

lou

15 years 11 months ago

JayCee

I can't find a fault within the whole poem, absolutely gorgeous. Much love Lou xx
lou

lou

15 years 11 months ago

JayCee

Whoops I posted comment 3 times lol
lou

lou

15 years 11 months ago

JayCee

I still cant find a fault lol Much love Lou xx
Seren

Seren

15 years 11 months ago

lmfao

You really got the jackpot didnt you lol I doubled up a couple of comments the last few days but havent had a triple .. thanks for the lovely comment and the read and ALL the comments ... biggest smile love and hugs JayCee (Quote~~"It is by universal misunderstanding that all agree. For if, by ill luck, people understood each other, they would never agree. "--Charles Baudelaire)
loved

loved

15 years 11 months ago

the more

i read u the more i want to words flow like nectar in ur verse teach me the art of this way to converse have mercy upon this aging soul whose whole aim is to share the vision of life as one whole... MY NEW BLOG NAME WOULD BE LOVELTLOVEDLYHONEYVISIONARY
Seren

Seren

15 years 11 months ago

Dear Loved

Thank you for the lovely comment I am so happy you enjoy reading my poems I really appreciate it I will be sure to check out your blog love and big hugs JayCee (Quote~~"It is by universal misunderstanding that all agree. For if, by ill luck, people understood each other, they would never agree. "--Charles Baudelaire)