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Love Not At First Sight

Love not had I at first sight shown,
A friendly wind doth blow his breath.
He sees that thou be fairest at every sparkle
Unlike those whose first glance prevails.
I admit, the heart jumped not before.
Emotions still slumber, though mine I foresee
Knocking at doors of my companion
I opened it not, scare'st to see;
Too bitter that my heart thou break'est,
Too frightened to face the fears I hide
That thou reject my feelings spent
On you, you, and you alone.

Whichever moments I chose to be -
Yesterday, today, tomorrow; whenever be -
I say these words, but lo, I lied.
A hunger and thirst the feelings cherished
Remains unspoken till the very day I die.
The haunting relive these thoughts as always.
Me severed not, at close range I whither.
Too good to be true... Only in my dreams
Will I ever be loved by you.

Now cast me to the fire, I'll rise again.
Cast me to the sea and the shore will see my presence.
Never will I ignore someone so lovely,
Ne'er I resent an urge so true.
Thy portrait deserves a constant praise
Of beauty, grace and wit.
Loved not had I at first sight maybe,
But please receive my hand revived.
As stages show how stories flow
Let thy heart accept my longing.
Let mutual thoughts astound devotion
And fill in my heart's temperaments.
— Dennis Go, Jul 12, 2010

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Region, Country: Manila, PHL

Favorite Poets: R.S. Thomas, William Blake, Emily Dickinson, Dylan Thomas

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Mari Shine

15 years 11 months ago

This is a superbly penned

This is a superbly penned poem Dennis, with stunning visual detail draping each line, painting a poetic work of art of unrequited love. Wow! Lost for words at the amazing indepthness of this poem! Beautiful flow to the write and it is very finely expressed. Hold on to the dreams - one day they may become reality! Beautiful work Dennis. Thank You so very much for sharing.
xena465

xena465

15 years 11 months ago

Dear Dennis

I agree totally with Mari, couldn't have put it any better. Beauiful write. Just one thing I noticed that you may have meant to type in this line... Cast me to the {see} and the shore will see my presence. ........[sea] Xena Quote: Science is what you know; philosophy is what you don't know. - Bertrand Russell
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raskin

15 years 11 months ago

Is this a sonnet? I

Is this a sonnet? I haven't written any and am not always sure. I like that you wrote in an old style, was this hard to do? It reads beautifully. raskin
Candlewitch

Candlewitch

15 years 11 months ago

Dear Dennis

Exquisite, and I agree with Mari and Xena's comments, so aptly put. My favorite lines are: Loved not had I at first sight maybe, But please receive my hand revived. As stages show how stories flow Let thy heart accept my longing. Let mutual thoughts astound devotion And fill in my heart’s temperaments. Just one suggestion. With this line: A friendly wind doth (blew) his breath. [blow] Always, Cat
faithmairee

faithmairee

15 years 11 months ago

Very Lovely, Dennis

I agree this is really lovely. Excellent work, Dennis. Love-Faith ~I never say anything I don't mean nor do I say anything to be mean.~
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shirley harrison

15 years 11 months ago

Dearest Dennis

i was almost crying at the end! your poetry is truly sublime and this poem is so well written as it speaks so loudly. The not love at first sight seems to last longer! Poetic beauty at its finest! much love shirley harrison
Seren

Seren

15 years 11 months ago

Dear Dennis

As you can see everyone woman would love a poem like this written for them a thousand sighs of poem love and hugs JayCee (Quote~~"It is by universal misunderstanding that all agree. For if, by ill luck, people understood each other, they would never agree. "--Charles Baudelaire)
Seren

Seren

15 years 11 months ago

Dear Dennis

As you can see everyone woman would love a poem like this written for them a thousand sighs of poem love and hugs JayCee (Quote~~"It is by universal misunderstanding that all agree. For if, by ill luck, people understood each other, they would never agree. "--Charles Baudelaire)
Seren

Seren

15 years 11 months ago

nominated :) (Quote~~”It

nominated :) (Quote~~"It is by universal misunderstanding that all agree. For if, by ill luck, people understood each other, they would never agree. "--Charles Baudelaire)