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Too Late


Netherworld: The betwixt

And between of one life-time

To the next,

A holding spot of sorts where

We’re given the opportunity

To re-live our regrets, perplexed

A place to think long and hard

On actions we could have taken

To ease the burdens of someone else

Whose pain was unmistaken

Yet, perhaps, when we turned our backs,

We convinced ourselves it was not

Our worry; figured someone else

Would come along,

Besides we were late, couldn’t

Stop, in too big a hurry

These thoughts make us wonder

Why we behaved the way we did

Tear our hearts asunder when

We reveal all that we had hid

What about that man, who was

Down upon his luck; swallowed

His pride and found the courage

Just to ask us for a buck and

Remember all those hateful

Things, words barbed with spite

And hurt; we shouted out in anger

To shred others and disconcert?

Looking back, we ask ourselves,

Why didn’t we take note

To understand all those ideas

So strange and so remote

Is it then we realized all the riches

We ignored, that could have

Filled our life to over-flowing;

Made us so much more

 

7.10.10

Tonya Greenlee

— Tonya, Jul 11, 2010

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Candlewitch

Candlewitch

15 years 11 months ago

Hello

An excellent write. I enjoyed the theme, although it made me a bit uncomfortable. There were times I could have done more... My favorite lines: Looking back, we ask ourselves, Why didn’t we take note To understand all those ideas So strange and so remote Always, Cat
Tonya

Tonya

15 years 11 months ago

yes, Cat, it does

make us uncomfortable. I was just thinking about missed oppertunities I know I have had to reach out and help. Too many times I have made excuses to go about my day and let others worry about it. I hope to take more time to stop and reach out. Not let fear of the unknown be a factor in behaving as I do sometimes, nor let it hinder me in making decisions that I am sure, could enrich my life. I appreciate your time to read and comment. Life has been busy here at home lately. I hope to have more time to stop and read and comment on others work. Poets have much to say and some lovely ideas to share. Thank you! Always, Tonya
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raj

15 years 11 months ago

Dear Tonya

while reading your write i could sense the underlying currents of empathy flowing from a humane heart...the likes of you who sense the pain of others .. makes this world a beautiful place... may there be more like you on this earth...a wonderfull message you have communicated through your poetry... warmly...raj (sublime_ocean)
Tonya

Tonya

15 years 11 months ago

You make my heart sing, Raj

Now, that gave me a warm fuzzy! lol. Thank you for such a lovely comment. Thank you for taking the time to read and comment. Your time is much appreciated. Always, Tonya
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Lonnie

15 years 11 months ago

Beautifully done, Tonya!

Words that we should all embrace and remember! Having once been homeless, I can relate to most everything in this poem! Bravo!
Tonya

Tonya

15 years 11 months ago

Thank you Lonnie

I am honored by your comments. Is true...we could and should do so much more for our fellow humans. Show more compassion. When we really think we have it bad, most the time, we just need to look around and see how very fortunate we are. There ARE SO MANY that truly need our help. You have come far sir. Love...the greatest gift of all. Thank you for your time! and God Bless Always, Tonya
DawningDaytripper

DawningDaytripper

15 years 11 months ago

Oh I liked this alot, I

Oh I liked this alot, I almost thought that you could have titled it pergatory, but your title does work. I applaud this retrospective write, not everyone is willing to see that a better choice could have been made, and that we can be enriched rather than burdened by them. how you use disconcert, not really flowing for me. how about, "with disconcert" instead of and disconcert Your last line left me feeling off in your how your using your tenses, my suggestion is Using Making, rather Make. Favorite lines, What about that man, who was down upon his luck; swallowed His pride and found the courage Just to ask us for a buck Great read! Julie D.D. Hello all, come and join us in Live chat! Meet n' greet, Neo night, lonely poems, teen night. We have something for everyone, come and meet your community!
Tonya

Tonya

15 years 11 months ago

hey Julie..

Thanks for your input. I used disconcert singularly, because it means sadden, distress, trouble in that tense. 'Made us so much more'.. In my mind, that is right. Because it could have made us... it is to late to make us.... does that make sense? Perhaps I am wrong. It just sounded right to me. I did wonder if Pergatory wasn't a better way to start the poem out. I liked netherworld too.. lol. I Really appreciate your time and thoughtfulness. When we get feedback, it makes us re-think what we have written and I know make it better. Always, Tonya