Seren

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Becoming Serendipity

these are just some
of the million things,
I've wanted to tell her
but we never, have the time

there are the thousand
days of light and mystery
that were brought into my life ...

Tu-whit!- Tu-whoo!

ii.

I forgot these things
as I flowed into the ether
that surrounded the pillars
of Olympus, and I,
rested in wait ...

Tu-whit!- Tu-whoo!

iii.

she returns
as a moriah on the wind,
a whistle through the barley
and in a fallen mask of hope

a muse that was
entranced to dance
on the glimmer in my eye,

Serendipity

Tu-whit!- Tu-whoo!

— Seren, Jul 11, 2010

About This Poem

About the Author

Region, Country: Beyond the Black Stump..Australia, AUS

Favorite Poets: Pablo Neruda, P.K.Page, W.H.Auden, to many and various to include them all ...

Critiques

Candlewitch

15 years 11 months ago

Oh, Jayne!

This piece is resplendent in its brilliance and I bow to you. My favorite lines are: she returns as a moriah on the wind, a whistle through the barley and in a fallen mask of hope a muse that was entranced to dance on the glimmer in my eye, Love, Cat

Seren

15 years 11 months ago

Dearest Cat

Big Smile ... this is only the beginning there is more much much more to this see the numbers lol ... so happy you liked it bigger smile made my night or week even .. been working on these for months ... love and big hugs JayCee x x x (Quote~~"It is by universal misunderstanding that all agree. For if, by ill luck, people understood each other, they would never agree. "--Charles Baudelaire)

raj

15 years 11 months ago

Dear JayCee

Queen of the Spotlight..this is one more jewel you deservedly wear in your crown...need i say more? :)...i don't think so...Cat has already said what i would have said otherwise..."brilliant".. much love..raj (sublime_ocean)

Seren

15 years 11 months ago

Dear Raj

As I said to Cat this is only the beginning lol I have been working on these for months ... and now I am nearly finished I am going to start posting it a little bit every few nights ... love and hugs JayCee (Quote~~"It is by universal misunderstanding that all agree. For if, by ill luck, people understood each other, they would never agree. "--Charles Baudelaire)

CyberSpace

15 years 11 months ago

you are brilliant my love

you are brilliant my love love hubby xoxoxoxoxoxoxoxoxoxoxoxo

Seren

15 years 11 months ago

Awww shucks thanks lol love

Awww shucks thanks lol love me xoxoxoxoxoxoxoxoxoxoxoxoxox (Quote~~"It is by universal misunderstanding that all agree. For if, by ill luck, people understood each other, they would never agree. "--Charles Baudelaire)

raskin

15 years 11 months ago

Another outstanding poem,

Another outstanding poem, JayCee. Wonderful images and flow. Enjoyed reading immensely. raskin

Seren

15 years 11 months ago

Dear Raskin

Thank you I hope you like the rest as much love and big hugs JayCee x x x (Quote~~"It is by universal misunderstanding that all agree. For if, by ill luck, people understood each other, they would never agree. "--Charles Baudelaire)

magics02

15 years 11 months ago

Seren's Serendipity Poem

You got it girl just as always right on top of it all. Love to see the rest of it. Great day to you and family today aussie gal Love and hugs at you from across the seas Mona

Seren

15 years 11 months ago

Dear Mona

I decided this morning to post some more tonight ... if I think its edited enough lol ... so glad you liked it hun much appreciated love and hugs JayCee x x x (Quote~~"It is by universal misunderstanding that all agree. For if, by ill luck, people understood each other, they would never agree. "--Charles Baudelaire)

Kailashana

15 years 11 months ago

I love the repetition of

I love the repetition of Tu-whit! Tu-whoo! I'm assuming it's the song/cry of bird native to Australia. Seren(dipity) it's time for you to kick it up a notch (like Emeril says). Unless you write a poetry book called *100 poems of Life, Love on the theme of Serendipity*. Love ya. ~mum, your best and perhaps your only critic.... "There is a kind of mysticism to writing." ~ Irvine Welsh

Seren

15 years 11 months ago

Dearest Mum

You are my best critic but not my only ... the Tu-whit Tu-Whoo is the song of a native bird but I dont want to divulge it just yet,it will spoil the ending, those bird calls have a tie to the ending .... by the way I studied this bird for ages to try and get the right words for its sound lol and this is only half of the sound it makes ;) love and biggest hugs JayCee x x x x (Quote~~"It is by universal misunderstanding that all agree. For if, by ill luck, people understood each other, they would never agree. "--Charles Baudelaire)

lou

15 years 11 months ago

Jayne

Sheer beauty , im guessing tu-whit tu-whoo is an owl? . lou xx

Seren

15 years 11 months ago

Dear Lou

I can tell you hun its not an Owl ... though your right its a similiar sound ... but its not the same bird ... and as I said to Anna dont want to say just yet it will spoil the ending big hugs and love JayCee x x x (Quote~~"It is by universal misunderstanding that all agree. For if, by ill luck, people understood each other, they would never agree. "--Charles Baudelaire)

xena465

15 years 11 months ago

Fabulous JayCee

The beauty of your words just slips off your tongue...Wonderful. Xena Quote: Science is what you know; philosophy is what you don't know. - Bertrand Russell

Seren

15 years 11 months ago

Dear Xena

I started these poems in March this year I thought it was time to start sharing the first parts as they are nearly finished ... thanks for the lovely comment much appreciated JayCee (Quote~~"It is by universal misunderstanding that all agree. For if, by ill luck, people understood each other, they would never agree. "--Charles Baudelaire)

scribbler

15 years 11 months ago

I thought

it sounded like more was coming.Also assume tu-wit.....a native birdsong......scribbler

Seren

15 years 11 months ago

Dear Stan

I hope the becoming becomes more clear with the revealing of more of this smile ... thanks for the comment appreciated love and big hugs JayCee x x (Quote~~"It is by universal misunderstanding that all agree. For if, by ill luck, people understood each other, they would never agree. "--Charles Baudelaire)

Arrow

15 years 11 months ago

i.

(THIS IS) these are just one of the million things,(no comma needed) I’ve wanted to tell her but we never, (no comma needed) have the time I never really hear about mysteries in the light but they sound much better than mysteries in the dark and this line lends a religious tone to the section, reminds me my childhood Catholicism - "Let us proclaim the mystery of faith."

Seren

15 years 11 months ago

Dear Arrow

You know I had 'this is' at the beginning to start with but when I got part way through the rest of this .. these are just gelled it all together better I will let you read the rest and we will discuss it when its all revealed ,.. see what you think ... mysteries in the light are all around us ;) ... and I liked the sound of it as well but it also has a tie to this story ... its more os story of becoming I guess you could say thanks for the wonderful comment glad you liked it love JayCee (Quote~~"It is by universal misunderstanding that all agree. For if, by ill luck, people understood each other, they would never agree. "--Charles Baudelaire)

Kailashana

15 years 11 months ago

“There is a kind of

"There is a kind of mysticism to writing." ~ Irvine Welsh

Seren

15 years 11 months ago

Hmmmm I love that havent

Hmmmm I love that havent heard it before love and big hugs JayCee x x x (Quote~~"It is by universal misunderstanding that all agree. For if, by ill luck, people understood each other, they would never agree. "--Charles Baudelaire)

Geezer

15 years 11 months ago

Too wit...

to wooo! I think it is the sound of a night-bird too! ~ love and hugs, ~ Gee

Seren

15 years 11 months ago

its not just a nightbird it

its not just a nightbird it sings in the day we well ;) .... but your right its a night bird as well :) love and hugs and a smile JayCee (Quote~~"It is by universal misunderstanding that all agree. For if, by ill luck, people understood each other, they would never agree. "--Charles Baudelaire)

shirley harrison

15 years 11 months ago

Dearest Seren

just superb and as i have also read the comments i will be so excited to read more just brilliant poetry and i love the excitement of the mystery! with much love always shirley harrison

Seren

15 years 11 months ago

Dearest Shirley

Thanks for the comment glad you liked it hun ... wil be posting more over the next few weeks this ones rather long :) love and hugs JayCee (Quote~~"It is by universal misunderstanding that all agree. For if, by ill luck, people understood each other, they would never agree. "--Charles Baudelaire)

greeneyes

15 years 11 months ago

Perfection as always!

Perfection as always! Elizabeth

Seren

15 years 11 months ago

Dear Elizabeth

Thank you so much for your kind comment ive worked hard on this poem and I plan to publish some more of it over the next few days ... thanks again love and big hugs JayCee (Quote~~"It is by universal misunderstanding that all agree. For if, by ill luck, people understood each other, they would never agree. "--Charles Baudelaire)

Electric Blue

15 years 11 months ago

Becoming Serendipity

Jay-cee I love the word Serendipity. It reminded me of one of my most favourite films where and English girl fall in love with an American man. This was close to my heart. Then I read your wonderous delectable tease. Of course you are the master of weaving words for us to try to find which way to follow. I was going to say the Tu-whit Tu-woo was not a bird at all but on reading your comments you have said it is a native bird of the day and night keeping us wondering in your mystical way and all will be revealed. I agree with Cat my most favourite lines of this are She returns as a moirah on the wind a whistle through the barley and in in the fall mask of hope This is me (you will understand) I find this entrancing, enchanting Thirsting for more, more, more Electric Blue

Seren

15 years 11 months ago

Dearest Magz

And you shall have more a lot if this one I might post some more tonight if I think its ready ive been working on some of this poem since Febuary I really appreciate the comment and yes I know what you mean about that verse being you... big smile much love and hugs JayCee (Quote~~"It is by universal misunderstanding that all agree. For if, by ill luck, people understood each other, they would never agree. "--Charles Baudelaire)

R.M.Shanmugam

15 years 11 months ago

she returns as a moriah on

she returns as a moriah on the wind, a whistle through the barley and in a fallen mask of hope a fine visualization shan

Seren

15 years 11 months ago

Dearest Shan

I am always excited when you like my poems there is more to this one as this is just the edge of a beginning thanks so much my dear friend love and big hugs JayCee (Quote~~"It is by universal misunderstanding that all agree. For if, by ill luck, people understood each other, they would never agree. "--Charles Baudelaire)