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magics02
Jul 11, 2010 ⭐ See this poem's read count — a supporter feature

Waters Edge

I came upon the waters edge to drink
quietly seeking some time to think
balm of the day, rippled waves of glass 
mirrored like waters, thoughts of the past

Things that were, thoughts of could
stuck in my mind, what only should
If not for yesterdays, and days of old
I wouldn't be here, my stories untold
 
Thoughts so precious of long ago
Memories I  think often come and go
For time is all we have on our hands
Memoirs of old, we write in the sand 

I came upon the waters edge to drink
quietly seeking some time to think
For days of youth are long ago gone
At the waters edge, I begin a new song

mms 7.10.10
— magics02, Jul 11, 2010

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Seth F. Hines

16 years ago

:)

I very thoroughly enjoyed this poem. I can relate, which is always good for the reader. Awesome job.
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magics02

16 years ago

Seth

So nice to have a new face (or back of one LOL) grace my page and I am happy you found this one to have a special meaning to you. I appreciate your visit and any suggests or crit you like to offer up I will honestly take. Yours Mona xoxox
lou

lou

16 years ago

Mona

Kinda sad and lovely . lou xx
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magics02

16 years ago

Thankin you Lou

For your support and visit. Anytime you want to comment to my works please feel free to continue with it as I appreciate all suggests and feedbacks I recieve. Love at ya gal Mona xoxox
yenti

yenti

16 years ago

Mona

A lovely piece to show the ways to wander, when thinking is needed. Have to spend less time at the moment as I need new glasses at the end of the month to read. Have missed the Neo's and their ways and have also been in a non writing way. The Two Worlds and the blog site of Sadie is taking a lot of time to evolve into what I would like to see. I think I will be making it in a Diary form, but that's to see. You take care out there, Yours as always, Ian.T
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magics02

16 years ago

My Ian

How nice of you to grace my page with a visit and a comment that I always take into consideration. You are one that speaks of truth in my writes and any offerings or suggestions you know I appreciate them all. You will get back to writing all in good timing Much love sent to you and Sadie Mona xoxoxo
Candlewitch

Candlewitch

16 years ago

Dear Mona

I love this reflective piece. My favorite lines are: Thoughts so precious of long ago Memories I thought would never come and go For time is all we have on our hands Memoirs of old we write in the sand Always, Cat
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magics02

16 years ago

I thank you Golden Lady

For gracing my page and writes as you do. Please offer any suggests as you deem fit for I appreciate your wisdom and wit. Love at you Mona
Hooded Stranger

Hooded Stranger

16 years ago

Mona

Mona, your poetry is getting better and better. This is a simple rhyming style but created with images and emotions that keep it alive all the the way through. I can visualise that the 'waters edge' could easily be your porch. The first and last stanza would easily be a strong chorus to this piece. That said it would probably need and extra verse. Good job my dear friend, I thoroughly enjoyed it, love, HS ------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- "With all that I am and all that I could be, I walk this earth and yet nobody sees me".
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magics02

16 years ago

Yes I shall ponder on the porch of waters edge

Thanking you always for a visit and a crit. Please alwasys feel free to offer up a hand or cup to thee as I drink from the fountain of me. lol I will be back time to go rest up. I tweaked her up a bit more let me know how you read it now and anymore suggests please proceed. Love Mona xoxoxo
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scribbler

16 years ago

edge

I thought this was very good but I read it as "classic".keeping that in mind,Line 10:delete"come and",line 12: change sand to sands,line 15:try for better rhyme maybe"for days of youth are in a past long"or some such.just a few thoughts.....scribbler
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magics02

16 years ago

Your right Scribe

I keep forgetting to change the style type when I am writing. I will let this sit for a bit and come back in a few days and work it out with all suggests and feedbacks and you know I love when you visit my page. My Scribe Man!! Love-Mona
faithmairee

faithmairee

16 years ago

Dea Mona

Very nicely done, Mona...i really enjoyed this reflective piece! Love-Faith ~I never say anything I don't mean nor do I say anything to be mean.~
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magics02

16 years ago

Thank you Faith

I appreciate the read and look forward to your crit anyway anytime is fine Love Mona
xena465

xena465

16 years ago

Great stuff Mona

Wonderful write, you've got me thirsting for more. I love the images you send us. Xena Quote: Science is what you know; philosophy is what you don't know. - Bertrand Russell
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magics02

16 years ago

Thank you so much Xena

For the visit and know I care of you and any strange words we had are gone from my palette and I consider you a great writer also. Love to you and Zak Mona xxoxoxo
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magics02

16 years ago

Thank you so much T

I am so happy to see you grace my page, missed you and catching up with all my reads here. Love to you dearest friend Mona xxoxo
hobo

hobo

16 years ago

This is very beautiful my

This is very beautiful my friend, it makes me want to dream dreams. I really like the lines I came upon the waters edge to drink quietly seeking some time to think For days of youth are long ago gone At the waters edge, I sing my new song *You can never pick anyone up if you are busy putting them down*
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magics02

16 years ago

I thank you once again dear friend

You're sweet like candy a mindful of plenty you speak of your mind of truth and of kind I love you for you admire what you do your my Hobo friend who speaks to me who lends me his hand I thank you so for all you bring to the table for I connect with you in a way that is hard to explain here at Neopoet but it is real and it is fine a friend for all times. And I mean that from the bottom and top of my big heart.:) Love at you my Hobo friend
hobo

hobo

16 years ago

beautiful soul

Such kind words from a beautiful soul. Your comment on my comment makes me feel like a king. I know although you and I have not been friends for long that we will be friends foever your hobo *You can never pick anyone up if you are busy putting them down*
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magics02

16 years ago

Thank you in kind

for your visit and comments, I do appreciate all of you who commented on this poem for me. Love at ya gal Mona xox
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Mari Shine

16 years ago

A delightfully penned

A delightfully penned reflective write, flecked with beautiful imagery and so finely expressed. Lovely crafting Mona. Thank you for so kindly sharing. Blessings....
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magics02

16 years ago

Thank you in kind Mari

So nice to see your pic and your visit to my page here. I appreciate the nice comments you left here, thank you so much. Love,Mona
Victorclaude

Victorclaude

16 years ago

“Things that were,

"Things that were, thoughts of could stuck in my mind, what only should" These lines were extant for me. Kind of reminded me E. E. Cummings work, even though it is yours. Nice. Victor
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magics02

16 years ago

Thank you very much

Victor for the visit and the read. I appreciate any feedback you are able to share with me. Grazzi Mona Magics

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