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Jul 10, 2010
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CRUSHED
Your black hair falls over the beginning and end of the weekend,
Softening it, shaping it,
Providing the frame for the tears,
That slide quietly between my skin and my skull,
Not disturbing anyone outside, only me, privately,
Within, your face etched with kohl, eyelashes and brownish-blue lips,
Reminds me that I am not happy,
With your face so far away behind me,
I am not happy,
I can only smile facing you and near your framing lips,
Giggling incantations in Arabic and French,
To collapse my lungs,
Under the massive weight of your surrounding depths.
— jorge abou, Jul 10, 2010
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Grieta Lindeque
16 years ago
Jorge
xena465
16 years ago
Wow Jorge
jorge abou
16 years ago
Thank you both. I am new so
xena465
16 years ago
You're doing just fine Jorge
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