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Taking a slow walk

Time is willfully crawling these days;He walks with slow and heavy feet.He comes with unforeseen delayskeeping you hidden away from me. Time hides you from my hungry hands.He plants you in folds of distant dates.He slows the shifting of the sands-A single day becomes a year. Now nights are dark and lonely here.Day lingers lengthy on my shores.Wish to hold you to me, my dear,But Time saunters at his own pace Time should rush, I wish- no pray!My arms are empty of your flesh,My eyes cannot you face survey.Yet my heart still feels your love. 
— Grieta Lindeque, Jul 10, 2010

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anonymous1

15 years 11 months ago

Waiting...Well Said.

Grieta, I really like this poem and think that you've aptly described Anticipation and the pain of having to wait for something great. There are a few spelling issues: stanza 1/L1 willfully and Stanza 4/L3 your I would have gone on to critique your poem, but you don't give anything to go on so I'll refrain unless you check the boxes. (For instance, Raw truth; What did you think of my title and so forth) Thanks, Lisa
Grieta Lindeque

Grieta Lindeque

15 years 11 months ago

Morning

Lisa, thank you for your reply. I did change the willfully spelling, but the one you refer to in S4/L3 is not a spelling mistake, as far as I can see. I wish to hold you to me, my dear I wish to hold your to me, my dear Can you please explain to me why you suggested this change? English is my 2nd langauge, and at times I need some help with the finer things. I checked the boxes, as you suggested. Grieta