Geezer

Jul 10, 2010 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

Mis-management...

Acting unconcerned, he pushed it all aside

But with trembling heart a'pounding, he was mortified

Not knowing all the damage, he tried to make it right

Unsure of everything, he stumbled in the night

Thinking of the blame, laid at the other's door

He waited patiently, wore pathways in the floor

Could it be, the way is blocked...the trail to back again

No way to know... no one was told... who could ever tell him

He hadn't meant to sin, exuberance just took the gas

Now he's looking for Exuberance, wants to kick his ass

He's made the promise to himself, and to all of the involved

His mistake won't be repeated, he's really quite resolved

Forgiveness is the balm, that will heal his broken heart

What he really needs, is the chance to push re-start

— Geezer, Jul 10, 2010

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Region, Country: New York State - USA, USA

Favorite Poets: Poe, Emily Dickenson, Robert Frost, Shakespeare, and many of the poets here at Neopoet.

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Critiques

poewriter58

15 years 11 months ago

Gee

Line eight I'm a bit confused reading that line no one told to tell him? Other than that one line the rest of the poem is great Chrys

Geezer

15 years 11 months ago

to let someone know, that the secret was kept, and he had no one to tell him, what to do. Does that make it clearer? I will maybe re-work that line, if I get the same comment again. Thanks for the read, ~ Gee

scribbler

15 years 11 months ago

mis

yeah,line 8 is a stumble.Perhaps push reset and rework it LOL.Poem hit upon universal desire to be able to reset the past at some points.......scribbler

Geezer

15 years 11 months ago

As I explained...

to Chrys, It was meant to let one know, that the secret was kept. But... since I have promised to work on that line, if I got another comment about it, I will. maybe someone could tell me what to do? LOL ~ Gee

Seren

15 years 11 months ago

Dearest Gee

Your what we can in aussie a staunch Mate ... and I know ive said it before but this poem just ... makes my heart ache ... cant explain it bravo huni love and higgliest bugs JayCee x x x (Quote~~"It is by universal misunderstanding that all agree. For if, by ill luck, people understood each other, they would never agree. "--Charles Baudelaire)

Geezer

15 years 11 months ago

Can't explain...

it either. The poem I mean...I promised I wouldn't. My heart aches for his cause though, I know how bad he hurts. Higgest bugs, and lotta love, ~ Gee

Geezer

15 years 11 months ago

Of all the comments...

I've got about this piece so far, I think you are the one who got line 8. At least I think so. From your placement of the [what are those little dots called?] in your reply, I think you got what I was trying to express. ~ Higgest bugs and lotsa love ~ Gee

lou

15 years 11 months ago

Hi

I agree with the above Lou xx

Geezer

15 years 11 months ago

Thank you...

just a little poem to try and set things right for this guy. Hope it works. ~ Gee xx

lou

15 years 11 months ago

Oh gee

Ware holes in your carpet no more, with a poem like that I'm sure you will be forgiven. Lou xx

Geezer

15 years 11 months ago

Wasn't me...

LOL but thanks anyway. I appreciate your forgiveness. ~ Gee xx

lou

15 years 11 months ago

I Bet It was you

lol

DawningDaytripper

15 years 11 months ago

Your a great friend Gee, and

Your a great friend Gee, and I am sure this will help. And if it doesn't, ALL GOOD still a fabulous write, lol. Really a very sincer and well thought write. Thanks for sharing it with us Gee, love ya bunchs. Julie D.D. Hello all, come and join us in Live chat! Meet n' greet, Neo night, lonely poems, teen night. We have something for everyone, come and meet your community!

Hooded Stranger

15 years 11 months ago

Gee

A great portrait you have painted here. Simple rhyming scheme but used to great effect. This one had a flow and tempo to it that kept you captured and needing to read more. Sorry to bring up line 8, but it is the one line that falls from the tight rhyming scheme. A suggestion: Could it be, the way is blocked…the trail to back again There was no way to know… nobody had tried to explain This is a great piece and I have read a few of yours over the last few days and this jumps out as being rather special. Nice write! HS ------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- "With all that I am and all that I could be, I walk this earth and yet nobody sees me".

Geezer

15 years 11 months ago

Did that...

clear things up? I think I fixed that troubling line 8. Thanks everyone, for all your great comments, and for making me fix it. I am very pleased with this result. ~ Gee

Candlewitch

15 years 11 months ago

A re-start button

I think that at some time in all of our lives, we need to push re-start! I love the rhyme scheme, it is perfect. One of your best. I can't pick out favorite lines because they are all so great. Always, Cat

Geezer

15 years 10 months ago

Thank you...

Glad you liked it, Cat. I tried to keep the rythmn going. ~ Gee